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Bermuda (poem anthology)

by gruzinkerbell


soak me in

When rain kisses the grass

with a love so gentle and feared

does it grieve its own past

and fill the clouds with tears?

Does it soak in the moments

when it feels it unworthy of love?

Or does it think its tears are a gift,

coming solely from up above?

When the quiet is disrupted

as the earth soaks in the rain

does it feel any remorse

when it thinks the love is in vain?

Please soak me in,

with a gentle, beating heart.

I can't handle much more,

but your love is a start.

I am much more than the rain,

as my eyes hold much more water,

so when you embrace,

I hope my love doesn't falter.


flamingo

I have pruned myself to perfection.

'And what is perfection?' you ask.

Perfection is tough,

and filled with grit,

and it doesn't shatter,

like glass.

I have pruned myself to fruition.

'What is fruition?' you ponder.

Fruition is sweet,

and does not miss a beat,

and it provides much more than water.

I have pruned myself 'till I'm salmon.

Ask me, 'What makes you have such a hue?'

Well, my sweet, feathered friend,

I am only pink from you.


Sunset

Remember when it rained?

When the earth felt frozen solid?

Remember?

Remember?

Remember when I laid?

On the ground?

Until the cold earth grew hotter?

Remember?

Remember?

Remember when the sun came?

When the clouds left?

When the world swayed?

Remember?

Remember?

Remember when the sun set?

When we felt warm?

When I left?

Remember?

Remember?


Brick and Mortar

I am scraped against a palate

Tossed against the wind

Made only for a purpose

To keep you from crumbling

You can't live without me,

and I can't bear to be alone.

But what good is my sacrifice,

to turn a brick into a home?

You are meaningless without your brothers,

and without me you'll surely fall,

but do I live for the person inside all of you,

or the bricks that make up the wall?

Tell me, what I am made for,

I'll surely listen, I will,

But as for brick and mortar,

I'm sure our fates are sealed.


Sandbanks

I wash away with the flick of your hand,

and with me goes away dry land,

any support,

oh, you take it away.

Any foundation,

you'll make it change.

I am dependent on you, like the shore,

I'm begging,

I'm waiting,

I'm asking,

for more.

Tell me your secrets,

they won't slip from my mind.

Give me your heart,

for sand grains aren't as fine.

I wish to keep you,

unchanging like the moon,

but you tend to move,

like a frivolous dune.

Don't make me move,

as I do,

with the wind.

Don't make me lose you,

to the sand,

to your kin.

I wash away with the flick of your hand,

so just hold me close,

and don't bend,

like the sand.

Bermuda

Bermuda,

how lovely,

when a storm graces your smile.

Oh sweetheart,

how I'm giddy,

when you get mad once in a while.

I was often afraid,

that your joy was forever,

That I was nothing more,

than a temporary pleasure.

But you stay with me,

throughout it all,

and joy comes in the morning,

when the storms fall.

Bermuda,

how joyful,

I am when you come home.

When the planes have not fallen,

I have no fear of being alone.

when the day plays out perfectly.

And you are swimmingly,

and the sharks fade away.

And I see you dancing,

and laughing,

and prancing,

I know that it's okay.

Bermuda,

my darling,

why are your tears falling?

When did your salty heart begin to break?

When did it seem

you were unhappy?

When did the tsunamis come,

and the earth quake?

Bermuda,

don't cry, dear,

I'll always be right here.

I have nothing more but to make you love.

And notice,

how quiet,

the world is when you're silent.

My prayers for you are always answered from above.

So darling.

Don't cry dear.

I promise,

you have nothing,

at 

all

to

fear.

Oh the planes,

they don't fall,

when you're mad or scared at all.

So why don't you let the storm,

pass away?

Bermuda,

how lovely,

after the storm,

you're happy.

The sun shines with

a lovely

ocean breeze.

The sand,

it is warming.

I'll,

take it as

a warning.

That you'll always find joy after the rain.

Bermuda,

Bermuda,

What do I owe it to 'ya?

You make

My own storms

and planes

fly away.

(Kinda went out on a whim when I wrote 'Bermuda' since it's so long, but I hope you enjoyed it!)


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Tue Jul 30, 2024 9:15 am
ToastK wrote a review...



omg, hold on, lemme get my reviewing glasses on (it’s been a while).
Hi Serrurie! I’ve been scrolling through the poetry section, and as a fellow Poetry Anthology enjoyer, I couldn’t pass on reading this beautiful work!

Anyways, let’s get straight to it!

soak me in
What a sad yet beautiful first poem!

Does it soak in the moments

when it feels it unworthy of love?

Or does it think its tears are a gift,

coming solely from up above?

I couldn’t help but think of God on the line ‘solely from up above’ here.
Overall, I love the metaphors, the way you humanized the clouds and rain, and the soothing word choices you made.

flamingo
This poem sounds so much like a partner doing everything to be perfect for the other partner. It’s normally an unhealthy relationship that’s portrayed in these situations. But, in this poem, it feels more like the partner is trying to be perfect to protect, to help the other.

I have pruned myself 'till I'm salmon.

Ask me, 'What makes you have such a hue?'

Well, my sweet, feathered friend,

I am only pink from you.

I love how this ends, showing how much “I” in this poem really love the other person. (maybe “you” as in the reader of this, who is possibly a flamingo)

Sunset
Oof, departures are always a melancholic topic in Poems, and this lives up to it!
Remember when I laid?

On the ground?

Until the cold earth grew hotter?

Remember?

Remember?

The passage of time that you portrayed, each of the lines ending in a question mark, both making the reader reminisce and ponder; it’s a beautiful poem!

Brick and Mortar
As I read more, i realize that these are all poems directed (somewhat literally) to the subjects in the title.
Like a brick wall,
Made only for a purpose

To keep you from crumbling

You can't live without me,

and I can't bear to be alone.

But what good is my sacrifice,

to turn a brick into a home?

this poem seems to be talking about a brick’s sacrifice to protect something precious, elegantly illustrating the want to protect your loved ones.

Sandbanks
Tell me your secrets,

they won't slip from my mind.

Give me your heart,

for sand grains aren't as fine.

The way this poem portrays the want to keep someone, but it being washed away as naturally yet painfully as the waves come in to wash away sandbanks, it’s superb (I’m running out of thesaurus words for beautiful, c’mon man, you made too many good poems lol).
Anyways, this poem really feels as if I don’t want something precious to go away, and it shows.

Bermuda
That I was nothing more,

than a temporary pleasure.

But you stay with me,

throughout it all,

and joy comes in the morning,

when the storms fall.


I love how this tells a story of sort. Bermuda is a really lovely place, beautiful oceans and beaches. However, it became one of the most infamous plane disappearance places because of the frequent and powerful storms. The poems slightly devolves as the poet tries to calm bermuda down. In the end though, through the storm, I felt ultimately that I could see the beauty of Bermuda through its storms and plane disappearances.

All in All,
I loved the different ways different subjects were portrayed as the love interest. The way you illustrate all these as genuinely beautiful creations is fantastic and now, with me running out of basically all the synonyms for “beautiful” I can think of, I bid you adieu dear poet.

Have a nice day!




gruzinkerbell says...


Thanks Toast! <3



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Mon Jul 29, 2024 8:11 pm
FrozenEntropy wrote a review...



I love the idea of personifying nature such that it can experience and express feelings of love, it feels appropriate given the beauty of nature. With this in mind, "soak me in" was my favorite along this list, although all were good! You seem to enjoy using the rain, and really water as a whole. You understand both the destructive element of water, as well as the gentle element of it, the part that creates life and fuels lush gardens and forests. I'm not the best at reviewing poetry, but I did like what you wrote here and, even if I don't fully understand the meaning between all of them (I take brick and mortar to represent harmonic relationships where two beings give each other meaning, I'm a little lost on Flamingo and Bermuda, but I'll likely come back to this later and think on them more), I'm glad I spent time reading your work here today :) I would say to keep on doing what you're doing, you've got a talent here.




gruzinkerbell says...


Thank you!




He began to wonder why he had felt uneasy at all. It was like a man wondering in broad daylight why a dream had appeared so terrible to him at night.
— Chinua Achebe, Things Fall Apart