Oh my goodness, this is BEAUTIFUL! Personally, I am a huge fan of visual poetry. Making the shape of the cross in this poem, with your words, was SUPER cool. The formatting was incredible!
Is there anything to love for?
Is there anything to hope for?
Is my heart too broken?
You ask some really big questions here. The alternating between both sides was well done. It really feels like I am inside your brain, with these racing thoughts going back and forth, uncontrollable and jotting by me.
Jesus
Yessu
Lamb
You are the Chosen, the Ruler, the lovely, Anointed One, with His oil, with His Love, with Creation.....
Forgive them, oh Lord, for they know not what they do, says Yeshua, the Prince of Peace, the King of Kings, The Lord of Lords, The Fourth Man in the Fire, The Angel of The Lord, the Holy Babe....
Please
Oh
God
Forgive
Me
Please
Don't
Leave.
WOW! This is my favourite thing I have seen all week. We aren't just reading the literal words, but we are seeing them in the shape of the cross. it is visual art too. The desperate tone, combined with the falling element of the cross was so nice. All of these different names and titles combined have a very strong emotional aspect for me. And at the end, it is this sincere prayer that almost makes me cry because it is so powerful. I like what you did in the next part too, with the words having the strikethrough on them. Perhaps it shows things you are too afraid to say to anyone except for God, or even him crossing them out for you, showing you that you are strong enough. The ending was a powerful response, that was so lovely.
Overall, this was a very sweet diary and response. I really hope you write more like this soon <33
Your friend,
Ellie
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