What Is A Person?

Hey there!! I'm here to give you a review on this quite introspective and thoughtful poem of yours!
First of all, this is a lovely representation of insecurities. In the first part, you've really captured our attention and drawn us in with these strong images (slashed, distorted--these words are dramatic and interesting!!). I also commend you for picking a rhyme scheme and sticking to it, that can be difficult but you stuck with it to the very end.
My biggest critique on this is that it just seems all over the place. I found myself wanting there to be an overarching theme, but it just seems like the narrator is complaining about everything in their life. Which is a shame, because the individual images you have here are amazing! In my opinion, you should stick with an overarching theme of insecurity--I think the exploration of self-worth in the beginning, plus the narrator's dream for a future self are two very strong sections that stood out.
My favorite part definitely is the narrator talking about the person they will be--"healed and pretty". It feels wistful, and although it rhymed here, that never felt corny to me as the reader.

I hate silver, it makes me look old.

I think this line could be omitted, it doesn't really fit with the rest of the section.
Overall, I definitely enjoyed reading this!
<3, daisy (formerly theromanticchemist)

Hello again, my friend!! I loved your last piece, so I decided to read this lovely poem of yours. Let's jump right into it!

There are so many people. How can I choose?

So many hearts to break, and so much hope to lose.

Well, I am drawn in right away! I love poems that ask questions because it really engages me Right away, I get this sense of desire, but also dread. As we continue, it seems like you have this desire to make others happy and to do good in the world, but you are really struggling yourself. You feel the dread and are unsure about how you can possibly continue to be who you used to be.

Is my reflection distorted, simply a ploy?

I poked at the bull until he slashed me with his horns.

I love these lines so much. It is almost like you don't even recognize yourself after everything that you have gone through. I also get that strong feeling of guilt for what you had doner, as if you blame yourself for being in this space. Also, I love the rhymes! They seem quite consistent throughout the entire poem and I was very impressed at how easily it flows. I get such a strong sense of... what is the word... unwanted growth? You have become a person that you regret, in a way.

One thing that I noticed about this poem is that it feels very organized. Each line is its own thought. There are not a lot of ideas that continue more than a line or two, so it would be cool to see some of the ideas stretched out a bit more. They are so so good, so I want to have more details and continuation! It would also be nice to have a part at the end of the poem come back to something at the beginning, if that makes sense. Overall though, I love the questions you ask, the messages you share, the rhymes, and most importantly, the emotions you made me feel. You are an incredible writer and I was engaged the whole time <33

Amazing

Your friend,
Ellie