hiiiii!
your poem is absolutely phenomenal. i’ve never related to someone else’s words more. the way that you were able to perfectly capture the longing of a different life is so full with peace.. it seems as though you know me, without having an knowledge of my existence.
[wish i was born a boy...
...so i can be a stereotype of a 50s gentleman.]
this specific part feels so familiar. wanting to be like the others, it in a way that’s you. i can’t truly explain what i mean, but maybe in some way you understand.
[i crave a word with chivalry behind it,
not a word which receives chivalrous acts.
i want to love her as a man would.]
this entire stanza is beautifully written. i can really feel all of the emotions behind these words, the anger, the longing, the sadness, the wishing, it’s all there. each feeling is very prominent throughout your writing, it makes you really read the words in their intended form.
in all, it is an amazing work of art. thank you for expressing that amount of vulnerability with the world. <33
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