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by fireheartedkaratepup


EVER'BODY READ THIS PART.
This is a specific type of poetry that reads the same way sideways and up-and-down. That's why it's a little funny.
If anyone can tell me what type of poetry this is, please do, cuz I forgot. :P (It was a school assignment.)

Edit: Should I space things out so it's easier to read vertically? Cuz.....people keep telling me the grammar is wrong...... XP

Spoiler! :
Believe it or not, this first one started out about my dog. Then it....morphed. Yeah, I don't know.

O how I love this boy
how much I long to see
I, I in his strong arms
love long his joy for me
this to, strong for my heart
boy see arms, me heart cries

Spoiler! :
Dogs are my life. Naturally, I wrote about them.

The joy of owning a dog
joy boundless like the blue sea
of like a warm summer wind
owning the warm sloppy wet tongue
a blue summer, wet with seaspray
dog, sea, wind, tongue, seaspray, joy

Spoiler! :
I had a lot of time on my hands that day.

How much do I love you?
Much more than you can know.
Do then, tell me much more
I, you, me, we are one
love can, much are we together
you know more, one, together forever

Spoiler! :
I've never been certain about the future.

What things do my future hold?
Things that are unknown to me
do, are things set in stone?
My unknown, set before my heart
future to in my eyes hold
hold me stone heart, hold tight

Spoiler! :
This is actually my favorite, I think. Except for the last two lines. Hey, you try writing one of these!

Why should I write a poem?
Should I follow the lover's trend?
I follow the stars to death, write the stars in my eyes,
a lover's to my aching heart,
poem, trend, death, eyes, heart, cry

Spoiler! :
I have doubts.

How can I know what's real?
Can I ask some wise man?
I ask how do I know
know some do help me now
what's wise I, me, we, you?
Real man, know now you are

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Yeah, it gets confusing.


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Sat Apr 30, 2011 7:19 pm
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Hmmmm. I like these. X3




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Wed Apr 27, 2011 5:42 am
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How much do I love you?
Much more than you can know.
Do then, tell me much more
I, you, me, we are one
love can, much are we together
you know more, one, together forever


Wow! Is about all I can say!

What things do my future hold?
Things that are unknown to me
do, are things set in stone?
My unknown, set before my heart
future to in my eyes hold
hold me stone heart, hold tight


I am not great in poetry but...the 'do' on the second line kind seemed off for some reason. Other than that good job!

These are very touching pieces! Keep up the good work!

~FW~




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Wed Apr 27, 2011 5:29 am
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Hello again. Just thought I would check over this for you since you asked. Here it goes...

O how I love this boy<<<<<It should be Oh.
dog, sea, wind, tongue, seaspray, joy<<<<<<< Not 100% sure on this, but I believe Seaspreay is 2 words, like Sea Spray. Any1 clarify that?

Other than the commas, which we talked about already, thats basically all I see. I actually not very good at reviewing poems because im honestly not big into poetry, but just thought I would help anyway. Keep up the good work.




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This was good stuff. A few gramma errors but other than that it was nice. Keep up the good work. Maybe sometime you could review some of my work?





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— Immanuel Kant, Philosopher