Annoying

by fireheartedkaratepup

Published April 8, 2011

In Poetry

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This is something I wrote when I was annoyed. It is extremely short, and I am only posting it because I don't want to add it to my profile or signature and it's faintly amusing (if a bit disturbing at the end. O.o)

Spoiler! :
And no, I don't actually want to shoot anybody.


Whining, whining, stop complaining!
You may think you're entertaining
But you're not, you're really not.
In fact, I think you should be shot.


Yeah......there was this kid in my class who got on my nerves. I'm something of a passive-aggressive beezatch at times. And again, I wouldn't actually shoot anyone.....unless it was with rubber bullets of Nerf guns or a stun gun or an airsoft gun or a paintball gun or maybe even a bb gun.....

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TheCodex
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TheCodex wrote a review Review · Jun 28, 2011

I'm just going to take it for what it's worth- a funny, short little drabble. I like it :) Don't you just get so annoyed you just write an angry poem? I make such things up in my head, I just don't write them down. Anyway, cute little poem you have here.

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Baconator
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Baconator wrote a review Review · Jun 27, 2011

I love how it relates to everyday life. There always someone talking and acting like a hot-shot or trying to be funny. Sometimes that person is ourselves. You get so angry at the person its unimaginable. The rhyme scheme makes it funny and how it ends ubruptly with

In fact, I think you should be shot.
Epic job! :)

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IKnowAll
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IKnowAll wrote a review Review · May 14, 2011

Hehehe... I used to be really annoying... Now I'm just a little annoying... On the good days hehe. Although I was a pretty big hypocrite when I was little, people would be half as annoying as me and I'd get more annoyed at them than they would at me... Great though!... Hehe.

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Lavvie
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Lavvie wrote a review Review · May 1, 2011

Hi there. Lavvi in to review.

This was sadistically hilarious. I laughed my head off. Pretty awesome and I haven't read a limerick it what seems forever. So I was happy to read one so well executed and written. However I think the third line felt like you had nothing else to say. It was just a little: "OKAY. WE GET IT." Sort of. If you know what I mean.

I hope the bothersome person gets a taste of their own medicine soon :)

Yours,
Lavvi

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Kwantack
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Kwantack wrote a review Review · May 1, 2011

XD XD XD I totally have someone that I should listen to this poem! Do you mind if I recite it to him? I really liked this. It's really funny and there's nothing I would add or take away from it. It's perfect. Sorry, I'm like reviewing a bunch of your stuff, but hey, it's review day! Why not? Awesome possum job with this! Keep writing!

sapphirewednesday commented Comment · Apr 13, 2011

I like it! my poems dont rhyme! haha

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HessicaJolt
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HessicaJolt wrote a review Review · Apr 13, 2011

I imagined someone reading this with a very assertive and angry tone. It made me laugh. I love it when people can capture their feelings while making it creative. It puts a smile on my face every time :D Great job, keep it up!

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Bivrax
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Bivrax commented Comment · Apr 12, 2011

I liked it. Very simple. Easy to follow. Just what I'm looking for. I can tell you didn't try and be all fancy. You just wrote how you felt. Even without that explanation at the bottom, it would be clear what the general idea is.

Nice job!

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BehindtheMask
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BehindtheMask wrote a review Review · Apr 10, 2011

I liked it :D It was cute and amusing.

You may think you're entertaining Italicize "you" to put emphasize on it, and put a comma after entertaining. It feels bare because the other lines have punctuation on the end.



I'm not going to critique anyone else because it was simply adorable and shouldn't be messed with!

~BTM

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Yanni1995
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Yanni1995 wrote a review Review · Apr 9, 2011

I believe you when you say that you wrote this because you were annoyed. It was shown clearly with your words. Nice grammar as well. You're right, it is amusing. Keep writing! :)



When we are children we seldom think of the future. This innocence leaves us free to enjoy ourselves as few adults can. The day we fret about the future is the day we leave our childhood behind.
— Patrick Rothfuss, The Name of the Wind