Hello there Niraco here to review this fine day. Firstly I would like to apologize for any mistakes as I am on a mobile and the keyboard is rather tiny.
Anyway, I don't know much French so I cannot really comment on the title. I do admire the mix of languages which has been done before but I always find it grabs readers rather quickly.
I read both the old and new poems but I'll only be reviewing the newest as the two are similar but I like the new version the most.
I love the opening. Onomatopoeia is a amazing and underused technique which does wonders for a poem.
Your last stanza I found to be the most powerful:
I blink my eyes,
Give my head a shake--
This is why I must stay awake.
I love dark this poem feels as it evokes a deep sympathy within readers. I'm sure some peole will sadly relate an awful lot with this poem.
All in all a bitter sweet poem. Happy writing!
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