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*This fanfic song/poem is under my folder “Marble Hornets fanfics”. This is based off the YouTube analog horror series called “Marble Hornets”. This is about everybody in a way, but is more so about a character named Tim Wright who is in the show. Anyway, enjoy!*
Roads stretching on into a gaping mass of nightmares
Trees twisting in a way that’s all too human
Foggy nights speckled with rain
Hiding out in motels
Watching crackled-up VHS tape videos
They’re too corrupted to tell the truth
Lies to keep us safe and sound
Pills and cigarettes to push away the forgotten memories
Childhood creeps in with killing claws
Fears manifest in blank faces and decayed hospitals
Our loved ones taken, one by one
Masks bring out the monster
Do we even know ourselves anymore?
The world seems much colder when we’re all grown up
It doesn’t make sense now
But maybe if we stick together it will
It’s coming to take you and me and all of us
We all played a part in bringing out the demon
Tears in a broken building
Nobody was ever there to hold you close
Crowbars to break our skin
There’s always an answer
Don’t give up
It’ll be okay
That’s what they all say
Home is where the horror lives
Home is a forsaken hospital
You’ll never be yourself again
What was “yourself”, exactly?
Maybe the normal life wasn’t for you
Since that faceless figure still follows you
It’ll follow everyone else too
Unless we slay the demon
And give this morbid movie
A happy ending
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@4revgreen I made a Marble Hornets work.
I enjoy the imagery you use in this poem. It evokes a very strong image in my head. I have heard of marble hornets and seen clips, but not watched the whole thing. Though, I was still able to picture the world in my head as I read. The end bit about a morbid movie is a nice touch as I know marble hornets is filmed in a found footage style, so it is displayed to the watcher as a movie but is meant to be shown like real life, and it is so scary that is is like a morbid movie. The picture in my head of 'Trees twisting in a way that’s all too human' was very spooky and unique. Well done.
I’m glad you enjoyed this!
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(first impressions, initial read)
My first impression of this piece was that it was really cool to see a Marble Hornets-inspired work! I know you've done a few before, but this is my favourite. It's so original and really captures the vibe of the totally underrated series.
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(what’s working, strongest parts of the piece)
I think the strongest part of the piece is the imagery and how clearly it paints a picture despite being quite short. It has a terrifically creepy vibe running through it that even people who don't know the series can understand what it's about.
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(weak points, things that broke the connection)
You said that it was a song/poem and i think it works as a poem, but it doesn't quite work as a song for me. Other than that, I don't think there are any weak points!
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(suggestions, things to consider revising)
To make it work as a song, perhaps in the future you could split it into verses and have a main chorus that repeats. I think this would be so cool and original, as there aren't many Marble Hornets fansongs!
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I’m glad you enjoyed it!! I love writing fanfics about this!