*So this is a silly little Marble Hornets fanfic thing. It’s under my folder titled “Marble Hornets fanfics”. Marble Hornets is a YouTube analog horror show that went from 2009-2014. It’s not an amusement park lol, it takes place in the woods, motels, and abandoned buildings. I just took what the characters do, what happens in the show, and the quote “everything is fine” at the end of it and put it together to make this ad thing! Gacha Club character designs are under my forum titled “My character designs<33[2]”. Enjoy!*
Want to go to an amusement park but tired of all the gosh-darn happiness and families? Well, have I got the place for you!
…Introducing: THE MARBLE HORNETS THEME PARK! This theme park has got it all: Woods that seem to go on forever, abandoned mental hospitals haunted by the ghosts of your past self, weird motels that only have one other tenant and a faceless man who is always watching!
Here at the Marble Hornets theme park, you can be just like these fine, fun ol’ folks:
Relive traumatic memories like Tim!
Get into everybody’s business like Jay!
Run every time someone sees you like Brian!
Kill your friends like Alex!
….And if that’s too much for you, you can always be in a constant state of confusion like Jessica!
What are you waiting for? Time is quickly running out and the choice must be made today! Come on, ol’ friend! You don’t want to make a mistake that will haunt you FOR LIFE, do you? Well, do you? All eyes are on you, pal! Go on out and do what is right! Do what you must! Nobody said doing the right thing would be easy, eh? Stop watching this darn TV and make the choice!
He can see you. Don’t make him mad.
Call 1-800-OPERATOR to secure your visit now! That’s 1-800-OPERATOR to ensure your permanent stay visit now!
Everything will be just fine if you come over!
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I saw marble hornets and i was just like 'marble hornets? IM GONNA READ'
Omg you like Marble Hornets?!! Yayyy!!
I love anything creepy really
creepypastas? hell yeah. Analog horror? heeeell yeah.
Wait you like Creepypasta?
I literally have a folder titled %u201CCreepypasta stuff%u201D
im pretty sure i read one of your fanfics abt creepypasta lmao
Well of course this is a monstrous ad but I was really in the mood for it and you sold the horror park really well. It did feel like an ad for that place =D
and wow, that line does hit different. It's really creepy, well done!And then you hit me with this:
Also the very subtle note that this is a forever stay xd
In short the fic really delivers on its premise
hey there! :]
I don't know much about Marble Hornets, but I enjoy a lot of horror media! The tone being satirical and hyper complements the informational format; there is a contrast between chipper amusement park ads / a tone catering to children and the unsettling horror elements. Parodies are difficult to get right since there is a lot of character study involved--and for clarity, I am not in the fandom / I am not familiar with the characters--but this feels like you have a strong awareness of who each person is and the conflict going on beneath the surface.
There could be more references to the lore though. If this is a Marble Hornets fanfiction, there is little context to how that story went / why this ad is being written, e.g. the reference to the "faceless man who is always watching." That is a really intriguing idea, but there isn't much about who or what that man is. Ads don't have to give away *everything* to the reader, but for something like this media choice, I am unsure if most people would be able to understand the plot without more clarifying information. I'd suggest adding a sentence or two about the history!
That aside, I am unsure if this ad would be functional as an advertisement to promote a theme park. It's meant to be fantasy--which allows for creative freedom!--but most people would see 'Kill your friends' and 'Relive traumatic memories,' then turn the other way! There is a fine line between maintaining a parody format and joking about these events for humor's sake / not the integrity of the story. Your tone shouldn't come at the expense of the themes of trauma and psychological horror of the source; I would've loved to see those ideas sprinkled in rather than submerged *everywhere* in the ad because that was overwhelming.
I hope this helps; have a good one!
lina
I mean, this wasn%u2019t really meant to be taken seriously or targeted towards little kids. More so like a random thing that came up in my head about Marble Hornets. The fanfics I linked in the comment are more serious than this one.
But I%u2019m glad you enjoyed!
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