Warning: This work has been rated 16+ for violence and mature content.
*This fanfic song/poem is under my folder titled “Marble Hornets fanfics”. The main character in this is Tim Wright, one of the characters in the YouTube analog horror series, Marble Hornets. This references things that happen in the series in song/poem form. I don’t know how rhythmic or catchy I made this, please let me know. I also ship Tim x Jay in this song and I’ve tried to seamlessly put my non-canon ship with canon things that happened. I don’t know how well I did, so please let me know. The Marble Hornets analog horror series was created by Troy Wagner (he wrote spin-off books too!) and Gacha Club character designs are under my forum titled “My character designs<33[2]”. The end part is from a song called “Que sera, sera” because I thought it would fit.*
You got a visit from a friend
Or at least, that’s what Jay was
You haven’t spoken to him in a few years
Not after what happened then
It’s something you don’t remember, something your mind can’t explain
But still, you let him come over just the same
It’d be nice to see a friend
All he wants is a “screen test”
You were filming a movie with him, it wasn’t the best
It must have been a lot of work, no one can detest
Weeks pass by and you think of it not
You go to the clinic for your mental health, you go to work for your job
You swallow your pills like you’re supposed to
You take a drag off your cigarette to keep you calm
Life simply goes on
But goodness, what’s this?
Your friend has come back, is something amiss?
How did he know just where to go?
You haven’t seen him in years
But what the hell, give him your number!
He’s cool enough, why didn’t you do it sooner?
He’s asking you for tapes from that old film project
It’s not prime cinema, yet you give out the tapes anyway
No harm done, it’s all in good fun!
Except why is he acting just a little bit strange?
Is he not telling you certain things?
And you’re waking up in the woods
With that white mask by your side
You don’t remember how you got there
Your head is all blurred inside
Your heart is beating at that unnaturally high speed again
Hey, what’s wrong?
Aren’t you supposed to be getting better?
Why is all of this happening?
How come this has occurred when he’s come along?
You’re feeling kind of awful
Something’s not right
You search up the name of your film project
Good thing the videos were uploaded on a site
You’re watching through them all
You curl and uncurl your fists
Good god, all this time, he’s lied to you about this?
The memories are rushing back
It’s all starting to make sense
He wants information on fighting that Tall Man
And now that he’s back, so is that monster
For when the demon comes you put on the white mask
You run through the woods, then wake up with sorrows of the past
Your mind is getting warped, your seizures are coming back
No, no, no!
You were supposed to be okay!
You’re supposed to be alright!
Why’s all this got you in a fright?
He wants to meet in the parking lot
Sure thing, you’ll come
He says he wants to talk
No words needed, you don’t want to hear it anymore
You punched his face, now he’s lying on the floor
You’ve never snapped like this before
All that fury comes tumbling out of your mouth
You’ve been used like a tool
He said he was gonna tell you
But he’s just pointing his camera wherever he likes
What’s that going to do?
How is that going to help you?
Does he even care at all?
Or does he only want to film it all?
Did he think about how it would affect you?
You’re oh so upset you feel your yelling turn into not-quite fallen tears
You leave him all alone, maybe you can bury what happened far far away
Deep with your childhood memories, right where they should stay
You come back home
But nothing seems like it should
Days and nights go by
You try to live like you did before
But you feel this itch in your skin
Did it really end?
You can’t find your bottle of pills
Without them, you’ll fall again
You’re trying to fight it on your own
It’s got a hold of your mind, you can’t move your bones
It’s just like when you were a little boy!
No, no, no!
That was when you were weak
That’s why you’ve got no joy
You couldn’t fight it off and you’re not feeling too great
You meet up with him again
You teamed up him
Maybe if you both work together
You can end this horror forever
Onwards the two of you go!
You hotel-hop and collect tapes to watch
If you don’t think too hard on what’s going on
You can pretend that it’s only a trip you’re both going on
You take a drag of your cigarette
And you swallow some pill bottles you’ve kept
It’s not all sunshine and rainbows
But at least the both of you made amends!
He’s starting to feel somewhat more than a friend
And you might even be somebody he can depend
It’s not too bad to think of, in the end
There’s still the evil and malice but maybe there’s a fleeting chance of hope
Even with it all going on, there’s some kind of peace with you and him and the hotel
That you’ve never, ever felt before
Could it be that you’re finally free?
Searching for the tapes, trying to end the madness
Solace in one another, you’ve only got each other
You’re both in the woods, there’s no one else for miles
You’ve found a tunnel deep within the trees
Perhaps there’s a tape somewhere inside!
The both of you go in and-
Oh no!
The tall man is there!
The monster is watching you both with its faceless stare
It’s got ahold of you, it’s making you fall to the ground
Jay wants to help you
He doesn’t want to leave you all alone
You tell him to run, you need him to run
You can’t let him see you get hurt like this
He runs, you can’t
The tall man has trapped you in its power
You’re drowning in your pain
And now you’re being plunged into different dimensions of which you don’t know the names
In the woods and in the water
In the void where there’s slaughter
Then back to the woods again
Your head is ringing and your heart is stinging
You feel just like a child again
You run back to your car, he knocks on your window
He wants you to be okay
You say nothing, you drive away
It’s back to that old mental hospital your parents sent you off to
It’s all silent and in disrepair
It wants to decay away but it’s still there
You run inside, you have to die
You’ve pointed fingers at him but maybe it’s all your fault
After all, the tall man has followed you all your life
Always watching, always taunting
Never saying a single word to your ears
It brought you down to tears
Why didn’t you do a better job of keeping everyone safe?
Why couldn’t you keep it away?
Why couldn’t you just be normal, for God’s sake?
Just when you think you’re doing fine, it’s back to tear you down
The best characters have the most trauma
They’re alive to keep the drama
Your life is a movie the tall man likes to watch
But then, if your life’s a movie, then when will it end?
Won’t it ever end?
You should be able to choose since you can’t choose anything else
You’re all alone except for the tall man
You swallow all of your pills, you push down all your doubts
This is how it should be
It’s better this way
But you don’t die
By some miracle, you survive
You’re around to live another day
You’ve got to tell him, you’ve got to tell Jay
You meet up with him at the hospital
You spill out your life to him
You pour your heart out to Jay
You’ve never let yourself be so vulnerable before
It’s like you’re peeling yourself down to the bone
But you’ve got to let him know it was all your fault
If it hadn’t been for you then no one would have been affected
If it hadn’t been for you then you would have just dealt it yourself
And everyone would have been just fine
But Jay shakes his head and says:
“Shifting the blame is not going to work”
It’s no use trying to get him to see it’s all your fault
He says it’s more important to stop the tall man than linger in suffocating memories
It feels far too nice for someone like you
But on the both of you go
You’ve got to stop this nightmare show
You both investigate further and further
The more you look, the more twisted things you find
Your friend Alex aligns with the tall man, The Operator
He’s lost his mind
And where has your friend Brian gone off to?
You haven’t seen any signs
No matter, you and Jay still have one another
He’ll never find the tape
That tape, you’ve made sure to hide
Yet don’t you realize that everything comes up to be found?
Jay’s the investigator, always trying to solve the puzzle pieces
He’s found the tape and he showed up at your house with a knife
You didn’t tell him about that night
You didn’t tell him you took Jessica out to the woods
He’s been wondering where she was
That woman from the hotel, the only human he was with
Before he chased you he was trapped in a hotel with Jessica
But she disappeared and he was trying to find her
Jay can’t believe that you lied
He wants to talk, he’s pointing a pocket knife at you, there’s so many questions in his eyes
You snatch it from his hands, he doesn’t understand
You yell at him to “sit down!”, you push him to the ground
He’s got zip ties?
What was he going to do, end your life?
You tie him up
He needs to hear you out
No, you didn’t remember much of anything from that night
You don’t remember anything after you’ve been in the white mask
But when you found the tape you knew what had to be done
No, you weren’t going to hurt Jessica, you’d never hurt anyone unless you had to
You’re certain you were taking her to safety
She slipped from your fingers, Alex and the tall man took her away
She’s in a distant dimension, she’s as good as dead
If any of you try to find her, it may cost you both your head
It’s best to focus on killing Alex, The Operator’s human soldier
He’s the vessel of evil, ending him may get rid of the tall man
It won’t do if Jay’s fuming with distrust
You’ve learned from him to push aside ill will for the greater good
He’s mad but at least you tied him up for his safety and yours
If he’s too enraged he’ll harm you or get himself killed
So you’re going out to kill Alex yourself
You’re going to end it yourself
You’ll leave him tied up at your house
Where he’ll be safe and sound
You showed up at the closed down school
Alex is waiting for you
You’ve got a gun, you won’t let him run
Your horror movie is going to get a happy ending
But that hooded guy let Jay out
Jay’s at the school, he’s going to find Alex
Alex shoots him first, he bleeds on the floor
He’s dying frightened and alone, the tall man is watching
No, no, no!
You left him at your house
You knew that bad things would be abound
You wanted to keep him tucked away from your horrors
But you couldn’t even do that, could you?
You feel it all come crashing down cause’
Alex went off his rocker because of you
Brian’s all gone because of you
Jessica is trapped because of you
And Jay died because of you
Now you don’t know what to do
Oh Tim, don’t you see?
You’re the main character of this scary movie
All the torture and the fear
It’s supposed to keep you here
Your nightmares are The Operator’s dreams
Your terror is what keeps people glued to the screens
So go ahead and take a drag off your cigarette
Swallow those pills, live with those regrets
This movie doesn’t end, you needed this drilled in your head
“Que sera sera
Whatever will be, will be
The future’s not ours to see
Que sera sera
What will be, will be”
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So, first of some random thoughts I had while reading:
That sounds so sadI like the interspersed short questions like "Hey what's wrong" or "what's this?"
It was a little hard to me to follow what's going on, considering I still haven't watched the original ^^°
To the Relationship potrayed:
The betrayal the MC feels comes across really well. It's so real and forceful
Other than that? I was invested in the need to rescue/protect Jay.
If the song is rhythmic or catchy:
I don't know. I don't have a melody in my head for this so I suppose not? Sadly, I don't know how to write songs so I don't know how to help. But Toasted has mentioned a few things in her review that sound reasonable! I think some repetition in the song could have worked wonders!
Just like you, I am unfamiliar with writing songs. But I tried to put as much as I could to convey a story. :>
I%u2019m glad you enjoyed! ^v^
Hi there!
As a fellow musician and composer, it was hard to pass up something like this. And I do have some advice!
Writing a song in the form of story can be hard, especially because the story can come out distorted, being more of a poem or a poorly told short story. I have experienced this, and it's really hard to do, haha! I would suggest to help with this, try and keep each line of your song sweet. Simply and to the point. Using adjectives is a good way to get emotions across, but sometimes it's easier to use instruments to force feelings.
By all means, this isn't a bad song! It's actually really good. From reading it, I could imagine a sound, a piano riff here, the bass there, and for me, that helps me think of how the song sounds/would sound. The only thing that tripped me up is that it was hard to tell what was a verse and/or chorus. This can be from a slip in rhythm, really long stanza's, and other reasons. In this case, it's just length.
The sucky part about song writing is you have to make a rough draft (much like you did here), then pick and choose what to use. Some lines don't fit and you have to make the sad decision to cut them from the song, but that's okay! Your trying to tell a story in the form of a song, so like I said before, short and sweet, to the point.
I would suggest trying that, since the length of the lines causes a slip in rhythm, and the length can also exhaust/bore your listener.
That's all I have from reading this. It's a good song and you did a good job writing it! I hope you have a wonderful day/night <3
~ Taost