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lovesick

by avimoon


my love for you
knows no bounds.
every time i see you,
my heart swells.

cozy sweaters
and comforting arms,
i can run to you
when i need love.
i mumble my
apologies
for being so stinky
when you smell so good.
you laugh it off and
smile at me
and i have to remember
how to do anything
other than smile at you
like the lovesick doofus
i pretend not to be.

i want to learn everything about you;
what holidays you celebrate,
which touches make you shiver,
how i can get you to melt into me again,
how i can get you to laugh,
what your favorite tropes are...
i need more space and time
to ask you all these questions,
but i'm sure we'll get around to it.

i want to share
all of me with you,
too.

but i'll be patient.
i want the
mutual baring of our souls
to be the kind artists sob over
because they can't do anything other than hope
to capture its perfection. 


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OMGGGGG POEMS ABOUT LOVE ME WANNA SPINNNN!

Hey valentin3 here to shoot you a quick review:

Wow! This is a super great poem. The way you express love just make me... AHHHH.

Now lets dive in:

avimoon wrote: i mumble my
apologies
for being so stinky
when you smell so good.
you laugh it off and
smile at me


This quote I really love. It truly shows the love that each character has for each other. *insert internal screaming*

avimoon wrote: like the lovesick doofus
i pretend not to be.


Calling yourself a lovesick doofus more than likely shows that you sort of a hopeless romantic.

Thats pretty much all I have to say! Make sure to capitalize the 'I'.

Love,
valentin3




avimoon says...


lemme just say yes yes yes and yes. thank you so much for the rev, I'm glad my own lovesickness has inspired others to truly feel the love :)



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