wow.
now we both know
i love you
and you
love me.
my heart is tumbling out of my chest
trying to run to you.
my hands are reaching
for your phantom presence.
i long for you.
and i want you to be mine.
my words fall
from my mouth
like how i unwittingly fell
for you.
i want you to be mine.
and i want to be yours.
we could rest in the sun,
cuddling in its warmth.
we could rush to the library
and pick out books
to read aloud
to each other.
we could free fall into our love
and catch each other, laughing.
you could melt into me
and i could smile and hold you.
it sounds perfect-
like a dream.
will you dream with me
while we're awake?
or better yet,
make it so i don't have to dream?
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This is such a heartwarming poem. The poem describes well the excitement for starting a relationship and what it feels like to be/fall in love.
The first stanza is well done. The "wow" gives it a strong beginning and it depicts the amazing feeling of the moment when you get the reassurance that you both have feelings for each other. It's like giving the beginning to a completely new chapter.
The message behind the bolded letters was adorable and I think it's also really creative. Not only is it cute it also gives a nice visual aspect to the poem and adds depth to it.
Love is truly a beautiful thing and this poem captures it really well! I loved reading it and I wish to read more from you in the future. Amazing job!
At first, I was asking why some letters were bolded. Then I read what the letters spelled, and it's really, really cute!
Now, let's talk about the other words of the poem!
I'm not sure why, but I love the idea of starting a poem off with 'wow.' It just makes me feel happy, but not like the normal happy. The happy that's solely from reading things. Do you know what I'm talking about? They're two different feelings of happy. I hope that makes sense.
I like the personification of the heart in the second stanza!
Another part I like is: "my words fall/from my mouth/like how i unwittingly fell/for you." I like the comparison of the two things! Unwittingly is also a good word! I like how it compares something from what seems to be the start of this to something now.
The ending stanza is really cute! I love it! It was easy to understand what the last two lines were referencing! It also really ties in the first two lines of that stanza.
All in all, I think this is a really great poem! It's cute with a hint of bittersweetness, and clearly going to be one I think about for a LOOOOOOOOOOONG time.
Please keep up the great writing! I can't wait to read more from you when possible.
Thank you for reading this,
Have a great day/night!
At first, I was asking why some letters were bolded. Then I read what the letters spelled, and it's really, really cute!
Now, let's talk about the other words of the poem!
I'm not sure why, but I love the idea of starting a poem off with 'wow.' It just makes me feel happy, but not like the normal happy. The happy that's solely from reading things. Do you know what I'm talking about? They're two different feelings of happy. I hope that makes sense.
I like the personification of the heart in the second stanza!
Another part I like is: "my words fall/from my mouth/like how i unwittingly fell/for you." I like the comparison of the two things! Unwittingly is also a good word! I like how it compares something from what seems to be the start of this to something now.
The ending stanza is really cute! I love it! It was easy to understand what the last two lines were referencing! It also really ties in the first two lines of that stanza.
All in all, I think this is a really great poem! It's cute with a hint of bittersweetness, and clearly going to be one I think about for a LOOOOOOOOOOONG time.
Please keep up the great writing! I can't wait to read more from you when possible.
Thank you for reading this,
Have a great day/night!
This is a really great review! Thank you so much for the kind words
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A great review for a great poem!
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supposed to be the revolving pink hearts lol