When I behold a dangling light in the sky
A beaming star shinning bright
Smiling moon, staring face up
Cool breeze waving past
The storms comes up fast
Thunder bolts like fire works
Bending trees
Creaking sounds
Humming hum, still a wonderful sight
Blue skies hanging smooth clouds
Reflects on land waters
Housing sea creatures
Invading colors and
Grazing pastures
All matchless beauty of nature
Sights of nature amazing
Beauty of nature entertaining
Qualities of nature endowering
Smiles of nature overwhelming
Nature is natural 
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Haha... I love the ending! The rhythm and pentameter of this piece are on point, making me want to read it more than once. All I would say is add a few more comas or other forms of separating instruments to break up run-on sentences. Other than that, this is a wonderful piece and you should be proud of yourself! Keep it up, my friend.
~ RennissanceBlade
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The piece is beautiful and well written.
I think some more descriptive, lengthy lines, would paint even more of a picture for us. Even just slight rewordings of what you have would throw more impact.
"Thunder bolts like fire works"
>>Thundering bolts igniting like fireworks<< my example.
"Blue skies hanging smooth clouds"
We went from talking primarily about the night sky, and stars/moon/etc to now a blue sky, it kind of broke the immersion.