A/N: ** between these parts ** is the process of someone reacting internally to a discussion about God. The quote in the belly of the poem beginning, "God creates out of nothing..." is from Soren Kierkegaard
He speaks pleasantries in wakefulness
Ever thankfulness grace the studies of his heart
How-ever Yet his, concordant intentions bring nothing
No Blue-grass fruit that isn’t sentimentally hauntingly oranged
** Mention of understanding was his daint were to be coveted surpassively:
Ever-but-less;
Trivia Accounts for Knowledge in the Contented heart.
1,000 & this one’s Life behind some other ear structure quoted,
An unreasoning pontificate doth thee form.
They see the monster (a Lion declares its roar)-)-) connecting Yah Bosom ((
A Shockwave material-eye-zed, “The Nerve!!
On some scrawny, deliberated boy,” But “But to Point his logic Out the door would be
To lash at the universe:
this engagement is scrambling my breast:
“How dare he (pretend to) Intearrogate me!?!!" - It ices over
~ ~ ~ ‘The Glaciers of~ConviCtion GRindd’ ~ I’m interminally seething
“How small was my vice, until i ran into this StronGbox!-”
These of artless blue eyes, His unearthly grip.
“My eyes as always were Serving previously , but oh Vile clear boy! vile stung & dancing Day- -~
What curse you bring!”
I was gardening among the nights’ stars, I dressed them by lantern-light
When in some sick shift
My vision locked horns with P….p & my constellational horo-scoping withered
in proximity of the Sun
“It started in a Defective Mindset
but with enough frantic desperation the Universal and most supervisional Trust
+;+;+;throws you down into the Cables of Stability-~-~-~”
Quackery that Invisibility stuff, I am no Handicap, surely dance or sing, We
AbOuND in fread- -O’MeN \:But if you don’t Decisively feel a wealth of love you’re frozzz-en
--Cadaverous --
And tho you might tell yourself that’s all you need **
You’ll find yourself reachin’ back for more hands-on items
sMitten & poSSeSSiVe St}rick|en {
Now: To persOn Ally Live is to Fortify a Presence in some other LiFeForm,
and, when Hell’s a fable to the philosopher
Altruism is always halfway to Heaven.
See, The simple inherit people, the same powerless people
None of Whom have the capacity to play a real Hero; anxious of The silence behind EpitaphS;
For to settle where we are early in Life would be an injustice to the rest of the essence;
leafing through historical contexts: Arthritic;
Eu-logic acts Deft to accompany soft sorrowes tombward & defend one’s graciousness -
and though not Here anymore, as a life may be mulch’d in ash,
It’s only for reason of talking with unSir real , that the majority believes that
at that point all our fortune goes
Optimism without really knowing the dead one’s destinNation, is contrived
but this, the Conservation of Matter declares must be preserved : ‘
Wombward ‘twas that person born BEYOND joints’ rust,
where marrow, clean_has been bled by bone:
The heat you Feel prowling The Atmosphere testifies it to us all
Strongholds (lo`ck’d) chainge the subdoer of Hard Time into cannibal“ism’s futile doubt
thru omissive powerlessness (that is, CapziXing )
unable to Keep situated Because youth must fold properly in compliancy toward All Else elder
Or as age increases, Affronted for revisiting What’s re
known to your memory Banks is Persuasion to feed from The Under Hand
for the most part
I sucked in insignificance’s bodhi, it was He Who Left No Tracks on The Wind, & little col’me
teething on the confines of the sky,
Restart? Refresh! Redo?!! Violincia strips the coat
Of the rat running to get aboard Starships ~ to have license supreme, to be Commander&Chief
Is it not Thus: to gain betraying words & affiliated status; to cover the standard model of thy nakedness?
My head went to the ground.
it was better to Rumple against my Stilt-skin, & venture
& Quest, & Burn, & cheat, & hurt, & waft in the stink of smoky vacillation
to iNfect wherE disenchantment ends ~
For at ends there shall “certainly Always” begins,
But if you can’t or don’t make any more ends…
How shall you ever get refreshed again?
The very stone-cold, corn-holed Hunger that inspired Vesuvius
Vomited itself toward the atmosphere & warped its MOUNtainous Stead
And that’s when restraints shattered without cropping the stocks from off me;
At realization that Here is Anywhere:
For the chambers of my Betrothed unfurL not in time
But are plotted in substance Forever &
thin air
for the Priest has anointed me:
Once, the flesh Hustled to hold more syntheticly produced creed
But heck! My self-thrillment was abusing an excuse not to let
my spirit be awaked ‘
To excru/R?{ci?at-ing, soft, coddling, cordial light
tweedling’in through the Hit N’RUN chinks } :
Howbeit i don’t know when my cushy pavilion suite & the games
Of Wondersome awe adoration N’ FaScination, obsession with compulsion that seemed I had
two of me
--disheveled
into a
DuNgeon
&Whom with this misanthropic sickness evicted glimmerous childhood glee -
These days
With Glowing chains
i adorn my neck with cerebral fever ,
My hair & wrists wreathed in jewelry -
I need cast no hissss my Tormentor’s Way…
for in the cauldron... the revisitations & susurrations of Pompeii’s dragon ... gRowl
Still a joyous, flurrious anticipation assumed he
So that in his ABlaZE absession he shot up heavily as a perphlume Over the city:
For wings it had smoke, for fAULt; extremely ClaNDesTine (but it was anger)
It crippled the Sun, the stars were physically reduced to liquids -
recaptured as A necklace of = mediating lights swept up in its nostrils,
It expelled its un = complementary convex notion fire belly paragon inside.
The Immeasurability of Him
Gladly he was seen slashing his Dignity into omittance /expelled into his rightful place
As he sang the infinitum song he had never intended to keep secret, rather share:
It’s just Too many saw smoke and Ravaging
In what was really The price of Dismantled armor’s Acumen
For He had all of knowledge to teach: but first he had to undermine us
if we got hung up
gawking at things In this Museum called earth
during painted Daylight - - - in darkness I reach back through clouded covers
wY~ZEet sense-i in-Grain?
Nevertheless His feat stamped Hisstory’s blinding citation w/ alacrity bold
And those feet left no trackSson the Winds in their Time, cause
They called Him impossibility, a Myth
and some - perhaps jealousy over time, opposition to This Bigshot?
for Their tongues abhorr’d tastes like veggies
of essential nutrients they couldn’t stand to ingest- - -as their Stomaches-Sat-Loaded -
Alone fully bogged-down, The Sugar, worked to suck the sting out their bones
it’s all only Composition:
OUR MOTORMOUTH KEEPS US FROM FADING INTO NOTHING RIGHT?
Look at what I can do, look at my desire I can will to life!
Few peers in the mirror like your innovative spirit as much as it swells with you Inside
And if they do you are left to guess how much they actually love you
Oh no, be it far from your family members to not sometimes fight against you too
Where now is triumph’s horn alone?
Well we see Fire appiles itself to Destruction; but it blankets its charred hounds
Why would you want it in your veins?
As creatures we did not do the creating & only beat the air if we go about life
hoping for humans to always be with us - and always be happy with who we are
I think that’s the Greatness of being dejected by the world; The Dragon’s wings
do not have to free with fire & Lightning,
but fans the warmth of freedom
“God creates out of nothing. Great, you say, impossible to obey. Yes, to be sure
but he does what is still More wonderful; he makes saints out of sinners.”
In every case and every time
let’s think B4 we Mentaliate withholdinG core-Elations as The Almighty’s Treason
the Upended’s Hardships infused are undone by fun-loving antics.
The Kiss of death is His tricky opposite & veils hyped up exotic look, within
toxic Vivacities
We know you’re gonna have it read your way or not at all redd
Except how much I would wager on your Teachers’ Caution-isms
Your non-Conformist-isms
Ever mAy be RUMBbling,- - but Vapid- , Overpressured to MisIdENtiTY, faking, mocking our own Single crock pot where we rehash our talents:
:CAUSE IT'S ALL WE GOT!:
You seem nonchalantly very scared to have a Shay’s Rebellion ‘gainst much in there
As for me,
I accede I am espoused to a lonely stretch of island
for I Stand Comforted, as if a creature that has wings
By a Famed Courage- even ‘longside cowardly boundary
- since this Pursuer i am loves to pock itself
& devote my Shoulder 2 Looping my future around my Purse past,but -
Memories mistell impressions of who’s what’s [| dust can’t feel pain, still that’s where we’er from:
wISE it in-grain’d for me Sensai?/?/ ?/
- during daylight - - -i have leashed my heart to sunset velveteen Colors
how your breath intercepted the pores on My neck, , , My vision, , ,
simply, deflated, into nothing, into one, into, Everything
How nothing i can say abro:Gates the lights on your sky end ...
toward them, i still ascend, Wriding, to learn; I will keep fallin - for Lumin’d chains;
reGlowwering gifts of hurt i didn’ see
‘til ‘Twas healed
Invisible at first; priceless jewels that were cementing my mind from tapping out
Nature’s law is season
Although dualities lodge in the open:
There are treacheries on the slopes, yet the echoes touch’d bring soundness crisp
Whirlwinds come, but they’re guaranteed to pass for some
Such temporal things as degree of living will be unemployed vassals in a hurry
You can pay any peasant, but can you even feed any princes?
After death’s shadow becomes an entrenched dream,
Or a banner of Gold is in hazes, by vapors of silver
+#* mystified
There, will be no one to hear what your will is
noBodhi was teaching CoN-Fines (e)’nd HeAvIneSS were needed
Albeit while they said “it builds character,” they fought to fight it
Not seeing character has no means to an end... except in loving people
Because it’s Loving Our Father
To hell with the monKeY-Jigsaw conceivings, and the lip warships amissly de-Vined:
The very source from within dead space resonates like untold magic to the kid of how the goodies
Get INTo the easter egg
Could all the laughter in the world but the Christian’s be tears?
The Whole Book’s sorrows the Christian
will have
But the laughter with Benevolent Hand in hand.
Safe from diverse SlavedriverS is his riches!1?!
My darkest hour became my Refinist
Noticing the micro & the Macro ; ; ; ; Knocking all my cells with scorched towers of canyon haematids ~ See the Illogical disproportion to every formula - Y it works is still unsearchable !
How Thus my being was MAGNIFiED
in God first bringing me loss!!!!!!
Points:
Time spent:
Canary word: Present
Possible AI signals:
Original Text:
Are you sure you want to delete this comment? This cannot be undone.
Mark this comment as a review? Points will be awarded to the poster.
Your comment was posted, but it wasn’t long enough to count as a review. Reviews need about four complete sentences (at least 250 characters). Try writing another review that explains your thoughts in more detail — the author will appreciate it, and you’ll earn points for it.
This is definitely literary Dadaism. I rate it 25/&. I didn't think I'd see anything like that on this site but you really did it so cool. Aside from the good phrases in here I have no comments to make. The whole appeal of this Dada-type stuff is that what would be considered bad really isn't when it's used like this. A lot of people might be ticked off when they realize you're writing anti-poetry, but at least I can't say I'm confused.
Indeed, I write articles in artistic form. Poetry is flowery balderdash with little meaning other than imagination
Also I'm kind of a half-witted idiot. I concieve ideas to the point where I understand them enough, because there's no need to understand it perfectly if it's already operable to you
Woah... this was very long to read. Too long I think, short and sweet is much better than long like this.

I'm tiana and I'm here to review this poem. As a disclaimer everything here is just a suggestion.
First and foremost, I am so confused. And as a result, I'm not even going to try to understand it. What I will review are individual lines.
When looking at the lines individually, it's clear that you are a great poet. However, you put your ideas out in a way that isn't succinct nor concise. This is where you lack. Through reading this I can tell that you could make a top class poem out of the good lines. I'll list a few of these lines below:
"Your breath intercepted the pores on my neck"
"I adorn my neck with cerebral fever"
"After death’s shadow becomes an entrenched dream"
These are incredible lines and there are so many other good lines integrated in there somewhere. It's about fishing them out, and perhaps making a more clear and short poem with them!?
Also, your capitalisation I don't understand. Could you explain this to me?
Hope this helped and I'd love to read more of your writing
Yeah, I coulda shortened it but I had a roll going. Took several months to write it, even tho I wrote the first draft in two spurts
The caps is almost always just emotional hammer blows I feel while writing. (I can hear it in the background of my mind almost). If it's just the first letter of a word, it often means that that things is of Importance