Nice poem! I don't tend to like nature poems, but this one was good. I really like that you used "its" rather than "it's" in the last line. Proper grammar is underappreciated and underused, in my opinion, and you nailed it there. The only grammatical problems are that 1. after the word "volcano" in the second stanza, you should have a comma, not a semicolon and 2. Since there are three things in the second stanza---ash, pumice, and lava--the first word in the next line should be shoot instead of shoots.
But overall, this was great. An unexpected gem.
Points: 31
Reviews: 95
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