That time,
When you get lost in a book
And forget what happens
So you have to read the whole page
All over again.
.
If it's from annoying siblings,
Or maybe the radio blaring,
Perhaps even the noise of cicadas outside
That make you get lost
In the book you're reading.
.
Maybe the book
Is changing from different point of views
And you have to go back
To see who is narrating
The current chapter.
.
The feeling
When you're lost in a book,
Reading the page several times in a row
And now even knowing what you just read.
Completely, utterly, lost in a book.
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Oh, yes, I know that feeling all too well. While I can totally, completely relate to this poem (I would imagine that most people on this site can), it's like the previous reviewer pointed out. This just is not the most... poetic of poems. You could use more imagery and poetic devices. For instance, instead of saying,
you could say something along the lines of,
That's much more poetic and entertaining to read than just saying, "annoying siblings".
Don't be afraid to spice it up. You've got a good start here, a good, totally relatable subject, it just needs to be more like a poem. I enjoyed reading it as it is, but I would love to see more imagery in it.
Keep on writing!
Thank you!
Hi! Dogsrule5 here to review!
I think you need to put a comma. I could be wrong cause I am not good at this kind of stuff, but just saying if I am correct.One thing. I don't understand how this can be a poem, because it is just describing a feeling. Other people might mention this, but I guess anything can be a poem. If you think about it anyway.
Nitpicks.
Number 1. I am not sure if this is correct, but when you say...
I didn't see any major mistakes.
Grammar: No mistakes here.
I didn't really see much mistakes to tell you the truth. Which is good because you are a really good writer and I think you should keep writing cause you are a really good writing.
Spelling: No mistakes in spelling either.
I didn't find any really mistakes. Well I will talk to you later.
Love,
Dogsrule5
Thank you!
No problem.
I know what this poem means exactly. I'm sure a lot of us on this site do, as writing often goes hand in hand with reading. I don't really see how this is a poem..... it's just describing a feeling. But then again poetry can be anything really.