Four Little Kittens

by WillowPaw1

Published April 15, 2014

E - Everyone

In Poems

Four little kittens,

wearing little mittens.

All warm and cozy,

in front of the fireplace.

*

Four little dogs,

under little logs.

Freezing and cold,

in the icy water.

*

Four little pigs,

wearing little wigs.

Playing dress-up

and laughing their heads off.

*

Four little kittens,

invite their friends over.

Four kittens, dogs, and pigs,

now all wearing mittens

by the fireplace.

Comments & reviews · 8
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Ang920
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Ang920 wrote a review Review · Apr 17, 2014

Hi there, ang920 here to review.

Awww, this is so cute. The title really pulled me in, probably because I have a small obsession with cats. I must say that I loved it! The poem has a nice flow to it, and a good rhyme scheme too. It reminded my of the nursery rhymes I loved to read as a kid.

The only things I would suggest improving on are the lines "in the icy water." and "and laughing their heads off." I fell like those lines don't go along as well with the flow of the poem as the others, but that's just my opinion.

Over all great job. This poem made me smile and brightened up my day. I can't wait to read more of your works.

-Ang920 :)

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TrudiRose
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TrudiRose wrote a review Review · Apr 16, 2014

Hey there, nice poem it was really cute!

I was instantly attracted to the title which unlike many other poems found on this site actually sounded like an enjoyable one to read.

I think it could make a really nice children's poem or nursery rhyme and can you imagine how cute this would be as a book with illustrations?

I think it's really nice to see people writing poems that aren't always dark and mysterious or filled with angst. It was really refreshing to read and you should continue the good work! :)

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Rurouni
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Rurouni commented Comment · Apr 16, 2014

Cute! Nice rhyming!


I can't critique it much though XD

So you're left with a comment!

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BlueSunset
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BlueSunset wrote a review Review · Apr 16, 2014

It's nice rhyming, and I like that when you said a type of little animal, they would have something little, too.

The thing I like most is the pigs- wearing wigs! I honestly think that it is super CUTE..... Some people may say or think that it's for younger people, but in my opinion it is adorable and for all ages.

These three different kinds of animals I like, and I especially like them because they are little. At first I didn't see why it was called Four Little Kittens, then as I got deeper into the poem, I realized why.

I hope you keep making more stories or poems about animals, because I am into them. I have to say your one of my favorite authors on this, and I haven't had the time to read your other stories, unfortunately, and when I have time I will hopefully read most of them.

After this, I'm going to like it, of course, because its about animals!

If you for some reason don't write anymore poems, I'm going to cry.

~ Sunset101

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winterbites
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winterbites commented Comment · Apr 16, 2014

This was cute.

Thank you :)

TheFlamingonator wrote a review Review · Apr 15, 2014

It's been a while since I read anything this sweet :3
The rhyming was on spot, it seemed fitting to the innocence of the poem.
As an animal lover, this really hit me in my cute spot and made me 'aww' out loud. Also, picturing kittens, dogs and pigs with mittens by a fireplace is one of the most adorable things i can ever imagine.

Keep up with te adorbs!

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Wajudah
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Wajudah commented Comment · Apr 15, 2014

Hey Willowpaw!
Wajudah here for a review.
"Four little kittens,
wearing little mittens.
All warm and cozy,
in front of the fireplace.
*
Four little dogs,
under little logs.
Freezing and cold,
in the icy water."
The rhyming pattern is what I appreciate most about it. It flows easily, lyrical and poetic. The opposites in the first two stanzas also add to the vivid imagery you've created here.
"All warm and cozy," in line three versus "Freezing and cold," in line six. The concept just seems great.

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GreenLight24
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GreenLight24 commented Comment · Apr 15, 2014

Awwww. *likes*



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