Young Writers Society

Oh, this is nice simple poem that would bring no trouble for me to review! Here we go.

I assume Fish is a bookshop. I don't know the reason you give it a name and not just say "bookshop" but it sounds redundant if you change it to "bookshop" because of the next line that has "book collection" in it. Eventually, I think it's fine.

For one thing, the benefits of having a Holy Bible surpasses those of having Jane Austen book. I thought that's the reason you put in the benefits lists, so that it'll be easier to choose which book to buy. Because of that, the revelation of you buying a Pride and Prejudice novel comes out of a sudden. Better to explain why this happens.

Apart from that, the poem format is fine. It fits what you're trying to get.

Very nice poem and title.

One word Strangle Love:

Wow.

not sure if you're criticizing the holy bible or jane austen.

Hello, Tulip here to review your poem! It is a very interesting poem, and it's format is different. Not different in a bad way though. It's a very god thing this time.

So at first I thought this was going to be some cheesy poem about how we act as good Americans bah blah. Then I started reading it. And I enjoyed it.

Every bit is true. The Bible does offer you so much, but why should we be good Americans with it when our politicians are corrupted and need it in their lives? The Jane Austen bit was funny but totally accurate.

Best of luck to you in future poems,
Tulip.

I don't know what the Fish is, but I could figure it out, sort of. Maybe change that? If you want to; it's not a big problem.

The poem really captured...I don't know how to describe it, but it did capture something about human nature, and it was a good poem, if that makes any sense.
Sorry this review isn't longer. I don't know what else to write.

But hey, it has a collectible cover.