Will wait to the end - I'm thinking its a good move at the moment, but the ending could change things, no? Will get back to you on that.
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Will wait to the end - I'm thinking its a good move at the moment, but the ending could change things, no? Will get back to you on that.
Thanks again. =)
I'm toying with the idea of deleting the first part altogether. It's not really important to the plotline, it's just there for some thematic stuff. With it, I might end up going over the wordcount, whereas without it I should be fine.
What d'you guys think?
and could still feel residue boredom rattling around inside me
quite possible in the form of projectile vomit, actually.
My initial thought was that this was some ploy to steal my phone: as in, I would hand it to him, and then he’d cunningly run off with it.
That is great.’
Thanks for the review again. ^_^
Remind me to buy you a beer one day.
OK, Moby Dick? I was so expecting that guy to turn into a whale.
Anyway, to be unhelpful:
a day shift as Blockbusters
and could still feel residue boredom rattling around inside me
He held up his lightless mobile as evidence [s]to this fact[/s].
Into my pocket I reached, and over to the stranger I handed my phone.
‘That is great.’
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