Hourglass (this was a free write- you are warned)

by Sureal
  • June 26, 2005
  • Short Story
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I haven't read any of the other Hourglass stories (I checked out your portfolio... you have loads of 'em...) but I read this one anyway ;).

It flowed well enough, and I had no trouble picturing the scene in my mind. So yeah - twas good :).

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hekategirl
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hekategirl commented · Wed Jun 29, 2005 3:33 am

This is so good Sam, I can't tell you how much I could FEEL everything you were talking about.

BUT MORE MUSKETS GIRL! lol sorry...

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Sam
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Sam commented · Sun Jun 26, 2005 9:42 pm

Yes, yes, a musket would be nice...:lol:

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Firestarter
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Firestarter commented · Sun Jun 26, 2005 3:25 pm

I really liked this. The way it was written mimicked the scared thoughts in Luke's brain, and the fragmentation just supported the scene you were trying to portray. For a "free-write" this is pretty damn good.

Except there are no muskets!



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