Hi there, Ellie-Mae here for a quick review!
Wishing you a happy day/evening/morning/night/whatever is applicable to your part of the world! First off, please remember that my reviews are my own opinions I’ll give honest feedback, but nothing at all is intended to hurt or discourage you in any way at all! <3 So, without waiting any longer, let’s get right into it and digest the spectabulous piece of literary work!
I love how you repeat certain parts, like this:
She'll suck the colour right outta your skin
She's a vampire bat, she's sure to win
I hate her so bad though I know it's a sin
She wants you to join her but I'll never give in
I'll have to forgive her sooner or later
But it's just so hard to forgive a hater...
and:
She'll suck the colour right outta your skin
She's a vampire bat, she's sure to win
I hate her so bad-
and:
She'll suck the colour right outta your skin
She's a vampire bat, don't let her win
She wants you to join her but don't you dare give in
You'll have to forgive her sooner or later..
Though I know it's so hard to forgive a hater..
this really helps develop the lyrics of the song/poem. I love your writing style. I will definitely be reading more of your work now!!!!
Ellie-Mae
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