You know,
I gazed at the clouds
and just thought-
A cloud never look at another,
and says “Your too fat!”
And then drifts away.
No, the clouds all float together
moving with the wind.
If they separate, it is simply by chance.
And the wind, strong and subtle,
has not once refused to push along a cloud
because she was too big, or too small.
And one tree never looks at her neighbor
and crudely says “Your too thin!”
And turns away.
No, the trees, big and small,
all live intertwined
in complete, perfect harmony.
Oh, and the waves that splash and crash
wouldn’t dare to look at the sand and say
“I won’t touch you, your to colors not right!”
And the sand doesn’t pull away
say to the wave “Don’t you dare crash on me!
You’ll mess up my beach!”
No, the sand finds great joy,
in watching the happy people
all playing in the surf.
Well, nature sure seems to have it right.
So, why not us?? We're quite smart,
why can’t we figure it out?
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this is and interesting poem, great theme, but you managed to write the whole thing without it sounding like something out of the bible!
Skill...
*Sighs, then stares out of the window, reminiscing about when she used to try writing poems like "Predudice Nature" then gave up coz they weren't for her.*
Thats a real lovely poem exsept I think you should make the ending stronger compared with the rest of the poem like
Nature lives in harmony, Humans live in war
They're secret we shall never know
As we kill all that can help
O_o I don't know just try something more poetic
Lovely poem and great message. You just need to correct some spelling errors, apart from that nice poem and keep writing.