“If I had done this before”, said she in a melancholy tone.
“But now it is too late”, said she with a groan.
I could not say “It is never too late”, it would be a lie.
I just said “Do not worry” with a deep sigh.
All I learnt from this conversation was the futility of remembering the past,
For past is just a shadow, which on our life is overcast.
Whenever I recall my memories, the bad ones occur in my mind.
But, I do not want to trip and fall, by constantly looking behind.
We cannot bring back the past how much ever we try,
So, it is better to laugh and smile rather than moan and cry.
“Wish I knew what would happen next”, said he on a sad note.
His smile turned into a frown, when he thought as he wrote,
That “Time-machine shall be the best invention on earth”,
And all his worries again turned into mirth.
I saw this transformation and started to think again,
This time, of the “Future”, although in vain.
We cannot predict the future, never could we do it.
It is like a candle which needs darkness to be lit up.
So, we need to exclude our “if” and concentrate on our “now”,
The Present is in front, which honourably bows.
Longing for that which is not ours, is totally worthless.
Our past is a memory and future is a mere guess.
If we act in the present, even the wishes might be fulfilled.
If we act now and now only, shall we be able to cross the bar.
We constantly look before and after and desire for what is not destined.
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This was a beautiful piece. It was indeed a good read. However, I'll just shoot this concern in.
The first 2 lines, where you said :
“If I had done this before”, said she in a melancholy tone.
“But now it is too late”, said she with a groan.
that was a bit hard to read. Don't get me wrong, I fully understood what you meant. Also, you missed out the word "said" before "with" . Maybe, if it had read :
“If I had done this before”, said she in a melancholy tone, "I would have known better."
"But now it is too late”, said she continued with a groan.
Other than that, it was a good read. I personally loved the line, "Our past is a memory and future is a mere guess."
Keep up the good work, I look forward to future reads.
-M.
Thanks for the great review..
the past is like a scar; a reminder of the battles we've endured. without those scars we will never learn or grow as wise individuals. I had to re read this poem, because I felt it. I love writing poetry myself, and could really relate to every word posted. Please continue to share your talents with us. NEVER GIVE UP AND FOLLOW YOUR DREAMS. keep up the good work.
Johanna <3
Thanks:)