Rain to my rainbow

Hi! I'm reviewing something after a long time, so I hope you don't mind if I blabber.

The first thing which came to my mind on reading this poem was music. I don't know whether it was because you referred to musicians here or whether because this poem is kind of rhythmic (as Sheytato said), but, yes, that's the first thing which came to my mind and I was very impressed. To me, the first line was the most powerful which set the tune for the whole poem. All those examples and similes increased its power. Overall, it had a very nice and artistic appeal.

Even though I felt the ending was rushed and could have been written better, it was a pleasure to read it anyway. It was fine to end the poem on a short, quaint note referring to Tchaikovsky, but I guess you could've added a line or two before that one giving the reader a glimpse of the present situation and its effects.

I enjoyed reading the poem nonetheless. It was very softly and passionately written and, you know, the artistic fire of yours shone through. You have a lot of talent. Keep writing

Hey there! Shey here for a review!

Overall, this was a short and sweet little poem that I quite enjoyed. It comes across as more of a rhythmic prose, but the poetic feeling is still notable. Let's jump right into stanza analysis.

Of years long ago I speak, when I loved you as if you were already mine,
As if you were the sun in my universe, lighting up my soul,
As the Beethoven to my symphony, the strings of my heart playing to your tune.
And then the light is gone, the music is stopped.

Of the present times I speak, when I have abjured you.
No longer the sun or symphony, but this time one step back.
I now love you as the rain, those pitter-patter teardrops on the glass.
The rain which has cleansed and painted a new rainbow in my sky.
The seven colours of poetry thanking you, my muse.
Music resumes with Tchaikovsky this time.

Hi! This looks like a good poem, so I thought I'd review it!

In that regard, it's well-composed. Romance is a common theme in poetry, and one that I normally stay away from, but you manage to be clever and interesting all the same. My favorite parts are your reference to Beethoven and the "strings of my heart," which I think is a distinctive metaphor that I haven't heard much before; and the final two lines, particularly as you manage to include a less well-known composer, the colors of the rainbow, and the muses. As such, the piece ends on a fantastic note, demonstrating how sorrow has led the narrator to new contemplation, vibrancy, and songs by which to enjoy his/her life (or, the painting of the rainbow, so to speak).

However, I will admit that the rest of the poem didn't pop out to me. For instance, I'm not sure if I understand the meaning of "already mine." Does this refer to being married - and perhaps with a family - or simply a mutual falling in love? That, to me, is the difference between a happy couple going sour over time, and an unrequited love that gradually falls apart. Beyond that, the sun line feels a little cliche-romantic to me, and, though this might just be the astronomy side of me being nitpicky, a sun certainly isn't large enough to light up a whole universe (you could try saying "the sun over my planet," as a more accurate example, but I'll leave that up to you, because it doesn't bother my comprehension of the poem much at all). I should also like to know what exactly separated this couple, damaging the light and the music. In other words, I want to understand the narrator and his lover on a more personal level, so that I might relate to the narrator's struggles better. Lastly, I advise not keeping words that would require your audience to use a dictionary to look up, as such words interrupt the flow and pacing of the work, so I'd suggest replacing "abjured" with something like "rejected."

However, all in all, this was a nice poem to read. It's solid and unique, and, though it could do with some fleshing out, stands well on its own. Great job!