Every room,
Every place,
Every walk,
I look for you.
When I do,
You shine.
You shine like diamonds..
In you, I see diamonds..
Your diamond eyes..
with the mix of an afternoon sky,
Your smile..
Warms up a cold room even from a mile,
Sometimes I wonder..?
Is it a coincidence I see you everyday?
Or is it me…
just trying to make my day?
Sometimes I wonder..?
Do you see me the same?
Am I a Tiger's Eye in your eyes?
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Hi....is this a Deftones album reference? And I'm sorry, this is so romantic like:
"Your diamond eyes..
with the mix of an afternoon sky,
Your smile..
Warms up a cold room even from a mile," T-T....like? Why is it so good?! I'm crying.
Have a lovely evening.
Idk lol and whats that- anyways Idk how I came up with that
Deftones is the rock-metal band and they have an album called Diamond Eyes..don't worry about it
EYES
(Looking at descriptions and my perceived meaning of the work)
A painting of gems this time! Interesting!
I know it's a metaphor thingy but now I'm picturing the guy with actual diamond eyes..
A short summary of this poem would be that you're wondering if he thinks of you the way you do of him, right?
EARS
(Looking at dissonants)
Didn't notice any mistakes.
HEART
(Saying something nice! And giving fun reminders!)
One thing I love about your poems is that you really have a style of your own there. That's an amazing feat.
I think the lines I liked most are 'Sometimes I wonder..? Is it a coincidence I see you everyday? Or is it me... just trying to make my day?' I don't know how to bring into words why I like them so I'll just say that they're beautiful.
And as always, I can sense a soul!
And here's a reminder to drink some water because I wouldn't want an amazing poet such as you to become a dried out husk!
- Your biggest supporter (that's one of the sweetest compliments I've ever been given!),
Darlet
Aww tyyy! Don't worry there are many mistakes in there like how the ending line is a little hm idk how to explain it but something's off lol and yes! He does have diamond like blue eyes!
Oh, when I say 'mistakes' or dissonants I usually mean spelling mistakes. I don't really look at other 'mistakes' because I suck at spotting those.
Glad you liked the review!
i love the repetition of the "every" your intro! it adds a nice rhythm and grabs the reader's attention. this poem reminded me a lot of the song "diamonds" by rihanna lol 🤌🏽
i loved these lines!
overall, great poem! you could definitely expound on it and add more descriptions, but it's lovely how it is.
one small thing you could just clear up a bit (if you want of course) would be the last line
this was very poetic, but the "eyes" after the word "tiger's eye" threw me off a tad. to help it flow better, i'd stick to your diamond symbolism or use a different description.
completely optional though.
great work on this! it's cool to see different poetry styles of other writers! i enjoyed this one.
keep writing, my friend <3
tati~
Tyyy! Lol I couldn't find any brown gemstones to add and that was the only thing I thought of and don't worry this one is a pretty old one from my doc, like I think it's the second one I've ever made
np!! haha it's ok <3