5 things I see, 5 things I hear, 1 thing I feel..

Hey there @Nataleeen32130!
Good (insert time of day wherever in the world you may be )! I tried to challenge myself to see what meaning I could grasp out of your poem, as I usually struggle with analyzing them so here goes:
[I'm going to try to use the rose (a positive thing), thorn (improvement), bud (something exciting or something to look forward to) method that people often use to evaluate their emotions about their day/upcoming events.]
🌹ROSE(s)🌹
Loved the stream of consciousness writing (what my hs English teacher referred to this kinda writing as 😅)or in other words how you wrote your poem like a list.

Love the alliteration and deliberately chosen action words! Really helps the reader feel the commotion surrounding the speaker and how even small actions, like people clicking pens, feels overwhelming and chaotic. We can tell the speaker is trying to single out everything happening around them, seemingly to calm themselves from being overwhelmed by all the commotion or something else.

Also loved all the repetition parts, they really help emphasize certain ideas. Like the repetition of "Oh who could blame me," shows the speaker's slightly guilty yearning and aching for something.


🍃THORN(s) (except there's no thorn emoji so I used leaves)🍃🍃:
This is likely just personal preference but I feel that the rhyming in the last few lines is a bit forced, and I especially feel like the word "stain," isn't the best choice there even though I see how it could potentially fit into what you're describing (the speaker's thoughts about her interactions with this boy/man whom she likes)

🪷BUD (again not correct emoji 😂)🪷:
I enjoyed how the last line was suspenseful, leaving the readers to wonder how the speaker would continue in their encounters with the boy/man whom it seems they have a crush on? It seems like the speaker could possibly be foreshadowing how their intense infatuation might later turn into their pain or regrets, but let me know if I interpreted it incorrectly!

Overall, this is a unique poem & highly enjoyed reading! <3

keep writing!

Heyyy you're back to posting your awesome poems
From what I'm seeing this poem is a unique take towards the common grounding exercise or the 5-4-3-2-1 method for anxiety, panic, dissociation, spiraling thoughts, etc. Which helps drag your attention back into the present instead of letting your nervous system run a feral little side quest.
What piqued my interest was the title of the poem, "5 things I see, 5 things I hear, 1 thing I feel.."
because it wasn't exactly what the method is, if you know what I mean. And thus I read the poem. Well, one thing I can say was that it was a devastatingly beautiful read, how the feeling is all the same, the constant loneliness...just existing.
I especially love the ending that goes "Or maybe... it'll turn into the pain"
Another thing I liked was the constant use of alliteration, it creates a sort of messy but somehow also a rhythmic pace (I don't know if that made sense, hopefully it did lol) with the consistent rhyming.
I like that you're exploring new themes. Alright, that's all
Keep writing ^^

I really, really like poems that start with the same word and/or letter. The short sentences remind me a bit of someone trying to find distraction during a stressfull situation. Guessing by the title it's based on the distraction method when people are having panic attacks?
I also like how the words don't really rhyme but still end the same way. It's interesting repetition in some way of comfort. It's the best way I can explain how this piece speaks to me, not the best in writing reviews. ദ്ദി(ᵕ—ᴗ—)