'Ello!
I think it's really nice you've written a poem for your dad! That's always a great thing to see because you can both write poetry and do something special for a family member, which are some of my favorite things.
I agree with the other reviewer; maybe some emotion can help. Now it just feels flat and I could give this to anyone, and it would work for them. What are some special things you've done with your dad? You can add those in.
It’s because of you
I like a bit of repetitive lines, but if you want to add some more creativity into it by making the last one worded differently, I'd vote do it. An example would be "It's all because of you" because that "all" changes it up some.
My example is really bad, so please consider not using it.
That's it! I hope your dad likes it!
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