Young Writers Society

Hey there! Plume here, with a review!

Ooh, what a lovely poem!! I loved the boomerang effect of reversing the order of the lines; it also played into the reflections aspect of it as well. It was so simplistic yet so effective, and I'm left with the feeling that there's more to this poem than what meets the eye. I'm not sure I'm poetically literate enough to interpret it, but it truly was a really gorgeous poem. Nice work!!

I think your green imagery in this was really strong. I loved the combo of mint ice cream and lily pads along with your mentions of the forest and sage. It conjured up a more mellow sense of green, and one that felt calming and nostalgic. To me, this poem seems to be about memories that keep resurfacing, some that have more meaning than others. Hospital curtains obviously sound important, but the other stuff, like the ice cream, are more trivial. Combined with the reflections/mirror/water, it gives it that enigmatic je ne sais quoi that tiny memories have.

The visual aspect of your poem was also amazing; I loved how it kind of looked like a graph. It was quite soothing to look at, so nice job on your color choices! It was definitely reminiscent of water. I did think that if it didn't have the plain text without any fancy formatting below it, I probably wouldn't be as sure where how the poem was supposed to read; I probably would have just gone to the end of the second part, thinking it was the beginning. But besides that, I think it was a very creative way to incorporate even further that feeling of reflecting.

Overall: nice work!! I really enjoyed this poem, and I hope to read the other two Water Poems you have. I'm wondering: are they related in any way, or are they all separate, just joined by the theme of water? Anyways. Once again, nice work!! I hope to read the other poems soon! Until next time!!

The same things can feel like torn all in itself.

I absolutely love the presentation of this.

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The use of the graph for this poem adds an interesting level to reading.
Though, I appreciate that the text is also available in a more traditional format as well.

Mirror images and hospital curtains are both adjacent to and opposite each other with school receipts in the middle. In the graph, mint ice cream takes more of the middle.

I like the juxtaposition of mirror images and hospital curtains (one that reflects and one that obscures).

"love poems

turn forest to"

"to forest turn

poems love"

I notice that these lines are the only ones where the word order is switched in the reflection.
Most likely, this is because the other lines are a single word or an idea that, though there is a space, a specific object is being mentioned.

This was an interesting read. Thank you for sharing your art!