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Medieval cities
1. would manage the f l o w of waste
I’m listening and nodding to
by hurling it out the window
.: earth could eat it
.: I’d forget –
.
Medieval cities
2. learnt to fear bad smells
replacing the fertilization of soil with
the sanitation system
pipe colonies +
maze-hierarchies
choked throats leading to:
i. oceanic pollution
a. on beaches where you showed
me how to make sandcastles
.
Medieval cities
3. bother
me
because
the poison
never
leaves
scared away
temporarily
by miasma-myths
like smoke dragons
dark green escaping
to the drains,
diluting
handfuls of displaces
scattering peoples
throwing them to sea
diluting
dead languages
into living mouths
never quite gone
diluting
.: only the colour
lightens -- foamy sage
dripping from my lips
well-hidden under the waves
of your jet-black hair, where
words can mean n o t h i n g*
.
*and I still trace them with my fingers.
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I liked reading this piece.The way the words were laid out gave the poem so much more impact and meaning.When the word “nothing“ is read,you can feel the nothingness from that word.The poem gives off an eerie,exissental vibe.Like it’s saying no matter what happens,there will still be problems in the air,the problems being the pollution you mentioned.Alright,I hope you have a good day and night!
Thanks for the review!
Hello, this is a review.
Love seeing another water chart! My favorite part was the asterisk at the end.
"well-hidden under the waves
of your jet-black hair, where
words can mean n o t h i n g*
.
*and I still trace them with my fingers."
I noticed that "flow" and "nothing" are the only words with spaces between the letters.
"miasma-myths" and "well-hidden" are the only words with a dash connecting them.
"i. oceanic pollution
a. on beaches where you showed
me how to make sandcastles"
This is the only part that uses roman numerals, which I thought was interesting since it follows the words colonies and hierarchies.
I also liked that "diluting" branches off into three arrows.
"dead languages
into living mouths
never quite gone"
This line was powerful to me.
Thank you for sharing your art!
Hope you have a great day.
Haha, I'm glad you caught that! That was def intentional on my part from what I remember. c:
Thanks for the review!