The Wanderer
I wandered aimlessly,
Always looking,
Never stopping.
When will I stop? I asked myself.
I didn't know.
What am I looking for? I asked myself.
This I did know.
I was looking for peace,
I was looking for happiness,
I was looking for pleasure.
Some days I found what I was looking for,
Some days I found the opposite.
I would look upon the way,
The anger,
The sadness,
The depression,
And I would shake my head and move on.
I know this world has good and bad attributes
But why do the bad ones seem to clog everything?
Because of humans.
We have started Global Warming,
We always have wars,
We always have anger
Every day I want to give up,
But I trudge on,
Looking,
Seeking,
Wandering.
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Thanks for being the first to post in my WRFF!
The poem was lovely and opinionated. It really shows your view on the world and I like it. A few nit-picks here:
1:
I feel like that "I would wonder aimlessly" should end in a period.
2: put quotes around "when will I stop" and "what am I looking for"
3:
I feel like you should make these all separate sentences and end them in periods.
4: Comma after attributes? Or period? Its up to you, but there should be punctuation there.
Off of that there should be a period after this vv
I do believe that is it! Lovely poem. I like the structure and the relatability.
I really understood what you were saying. With all the bad out there, it's nice your still looking for the good.
I can definitely relate. Nice poem. (:
this was epic. i loved it
I would say "... shake my head and walk away" here!
Everything else seems quite interesting. All in all, a nice poem!
LOVE