Ashes of my heart,
Grow a new love,
See me through the end,
See me for me.
Ashes of my heart,
Scatter a path,
To my affection.
Open a new door,
For everyday.
Come, come into this place,
See a new way.
Come down to broken heartache,
Come down to me.
See a new way a new door,
Oh, wont you please?
Leave me in this broken wilderness,
Leave me for the solitude.
Leave me in solid chords.
Ashes of my heart,
Just drift away,
Caress the wind,
Make a new day.
Broken heartache!
Just seems to
Go. (Oh oh, oh oh yeah-ah-yeah yeah) My broken heartache.
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JonboY³! Juniper here.
So, right, I've seen this song before and I believe I gave you my thoughts on it before? Yes/No? Not sure. Either way, I'm going to jump in and say some things... should be sort of easy since I know how it's supposed to be sang.
This line is the hardest to sing.
Same thing here! Come is such an annoying word... I always stumble over it when I sing. I can say it fine when I take or whatever, but singing it-- especially in this song-- is jusy difficult.
No matter how hard I try, I always, always, always butcher this line too. I change the rhythm here some how... it's just, I don't know? Maybe too many syllables for the song?
(Don't even get me started on the ending. )
I do like the song alot, though. It's definitely one of my favorite pieces by you.
Juniper
That was really great, I loved it : )
Most of these lyric lines sound very cliche when joined together. It's the classic love story. Broken heart trying to mend. I can't really imagine this being sung, something about it just doesn't sit right with me. But that is just me and I am not perfect at deconstructing a song properly. This is just what I found in it.