point of light

The last line 'forever' was kind of pointless and out of sense for me atleast in this short work.It is a good work still I can say and admit.
I am disappointed that it is so short but maybe this was your intention from the very start.So this review can not be that helpful or long.Can't be longer than this work heh.
Overall I like it in general.Sometimes it was not making sense for me as I said for the last part.Just one word that was not connected with everything else.
Honestly I can tell that I can not tell what this all work was about.I mean the idea and the story in this work that you are telling us.I felt it is kind of sad like other works of yours that I had seen but still beautiful and romanctic.It is for love,this is what I know.
I do not know if this use of only small letters was on purposeor you just did not put the capital letters on thieir rigt places.
Good job overall.

Hi, pen princess, and happy review day to you!!

I love your username....and this poem!!

So, I really like this! I love the words you used and phrases that you used. They hit me to the core and I really felt that I got this!!

Except for a few questions:

Was the non capitalization at the beginning of each line on purpose?

Was the lack of punctuation intentional?

Why the split of the stanzas for the last two lines?

Do you realize how moving this piece was to me?

Do you also think there should be a series of dots after you said,

a point of light in my thoughts.....

Hello and Happy Review Day! This is a short poem so I'll write a quick little review for you, which hopefully will help you in some way. I notice that you didn't use capital letters at the beginnings of lines, that is a good idea. For such a small poem, which contains one, long sentence, capitals can draw away a reader's attention. Well done for choosing lowercase. The last line was touching, you wrapped the poem up in two lines. It's a happy poem, good job.

Hey,

This is a nice little short poem and it was easy to read, however I do have a few nitpicks. So let's start with those and go from there.

(T)these nameless moments spent with you,
the one(s) i(I) love most dearly;
quiet mornings
cradled in the hands of time -
your words and laughter
glowing deep in my heart:

a(A) point of light in my thoughts
forever.

Good now that that's out of the way I think this is a really powerful poem for being so short. It's got a feeling to it that I find peaceful, which is really nice considering how my day's been so far. I think you have quite a bit of talent and this could be an amazing poem if you put a little more time and effort into it. All in all nice job, keep up the good work!
Sincerely,
Collideascope

Wow! This poem was short and simple, which I liked. It seemed to me that I could relate to it a lot, which is wonderful. There really isn't many flaws or corrections I can point out, simply because I find it powerful, even if it is only short.

"a point of light in my thoughts
forever."

That was my favourite line in this poem, because at that, I could just picture the person I was thinking of when I read it.

Keep up the good work!