Broken dreams and glasses

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Starting off, this is amazing! I love how it's so simple yet it's not. You've written this poem and it feels like a circle- going around and around and around again smoothly without stopping. I relate to this poem greatly- knowing what your dreams are and then they slowly become impossible to reach bit by bit. I often have regrets about things I never did, and it's comforting and relieving to see that some people feel the same way <3
Great job, and keep up the amazing work!

Hi @ForeverYoung299

I want to say, this is an awesome piece you wrote here. Kudos 2you!

"Broken dreams and glasses"

First of all, you have chosen an amazing title to start with, that's also the reason I chose to read this poem. Your title says so much about the story already without even starting to read yet. I can feel that this poem is going to be about someone who has dreams but won't be able to accomplish them due to some reason. I love it, you did a great job getting that right.

"Broken dreams and glasses
Through the shards of broken glass,
I see my dreams rising high up in the sky,"

Your words choice is also very precise! You make such ordinary words sound so extraordinary with your own magical twist that you add to them.

"How near they were once upon a time!"

Love this line, I think it's probably my favorite. It sounds so wow if you read it out loud. (I think I already read this line nine times out loud) 😊 The "One upon a time" really fits in there.

"And how far they went on that very moment."

This one also says a lot. It's as if all of the dreams just started to dissapair into teeny weeny bits.

"The ink blotted through my answer paper,
And my blood rushed through my veins,
All was good and perfectly fine, until..."

The build up of this part is just great. I love reading this, how you go from the ink to the blood, like the paper to the veins. "All was good and perfectly fine, until..." Oh no, I feel something like "dream crushing" is going to happen.

"If only I had realized that a bit sooner!"

Aww, that's so sad (*sobbing) It's always too late when it comes to the best things in life. I can really sympathise with this line. The "sooner" makes it even more, lively.

"Now, my dreams are shattered like glass,
Some failures simply don't give a chance,
They are made to pierce you all along,
And you wonder why you did it wrong."

This is a beautiful way to end it. (*clapping) Once again your word choice is awesome and you have a very nice writing style. The glass cuts so deep "And you wonder why you did it wrong" what you did wrong. I love the last line, I just kinda went into a zone while reading this. Your really got me!

I love the meaning and message behind the poem. You did an amazing job here. Keep writing and I'm definitly going to read more of you! I'm very happy I came across your poem! You really made my day...

- Rinisha