So I was think for a little wile and I thought I would give you a review on this. The reviews only going to be a quick one though.
Dark gray clouds slowly make their way
okay so I love how you started this of the lines cool, but you wondering why there is a letter in bold. Okay well I just feel like that word does not quite fit the line. I will suggest a different word and really you do not have to take it at all.
make < made okay so made is my suggestion, but I have all ready said that you do not have to take it at all, I'm just say what i think of it really.
But the hole your poem is great. I read it and all the lines are just flowing so well to gather. I think that your doing really well. I don't no if I said this all ready, but really this is one of your best poems ever.
The name to this poem just drew me in. It just sounded interesting, it sounded so real and truth full. But then when I read it even more truth and real. But also wonderful. When I was reading I could just see everything happening as I read. The words kept on turning into images. Then it was like the images started moving.
Putting it to rest for another day.
I love this last line, its a great way to end the poem. my image just changed here, I could just picture you tipping that last line, but the image was a little faded. as the last line was being wrote. I always feel like you shed so much emotion into you poems, and it just feels so real.
So that is all that I can really say about this lovely wonderful poem. if I was being mean then I am really sorry pleas forgive me for it. So keep up the great poem writing. I loved this one.
I hope you have a great Day/Night
@Dossereana Out In The Sky Of Reviews
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