Smoke and fire fill the air
A cry of war is everywhere.
This is war only the best can live.
Wings of gold soar through the sky
Wing as black as night go for the kill
Their attack full of skill.
Talons of flame slash like lighting through the smoke
Hitting their target with great force
Sending them to their death.
Howl of pain
Immense force and anger
And blood thirsty hunger.
Blood painted weapons
Wounded dragons
They fight for their lives.
Scar coated bodies
And broken limbs.
Only the best can live another day.
The question is will you live or will you die?
Sand Wyverns against Onex Wyverns.
This is the question
of life or death.
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Hi, FlamingPhoenix!
This is a... deadly (?) poem. I'll just be giving you a quick review and get out of this horror. I didn't see any grammatical or spelling mistakes so a pat on the back from me. I love your description very much. I could imagine everything perfectly. The swords, the blood, the dragons, the dead people.... *shudder*. I love the picture by the way. You did your rhyming beautifully, especially the first few stanzas, really well done!
Keep on writing!
~Liberty500
Thanks for the review. This poem goes with the story i'm writing at the moment. So sorry if it's a bit gory.
It's just gory for me, probably not for others though.
Yeah.
Yeah.
Mhm
Lovely work keep it up.
Thanks!
Oh and by the way thanks for the like!
You are very welcome.
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Hey! Great poem, I really liked it!
In one spot I noticed the flow was a bit off, but that might've just be out I read it!
Also a nitpick I noticed was coted should be coated!
Your spelling has improved tremendously as well as your writing! I can't wait to read more works from you in the future!
Keep up the great writing,
Love,
Dogs
Thanks for the lovely review! I'll let you no when I've posted another work!
Hey, there, Shikora !!
Here is Eros with another Review!
Absolutely lovely poem... Full of creativity... Yeah as @Sree says, you should really add it to your novel.
Now, onto the poem. The title is very good. It is apt and catchy. I love it how you have presented it. There are stanzas, linked to each other with beautifully and fine threads of ideas. That was really great.
The part that was my favourite was the added rhymes which adds rythm and like spices sprinkled over a delicious food, it makes it very interesting to read.
Just a little nitpick though,
Should be "coated"...
And another:
Again, "coated"...
Now that "coated" is pointed out, perhaps you can avoid repeated usage of it by changing "coated" in the stanza that I mentioned first, to "smeared"? Just a suggestion ...
So it'd read as,
Rest, the flow of the poem is very smooth and everything is beautiful.
Keep writing such awesome poetries and the novel too, and we would love to keep reading and reviewing them!!
Have a great day / night !
With love,
From Eros.
Thanks Eros! I really loved the review. I'll go fix the problems right away!
All fixed!
Yeahhh... Painted is beauuuutifull !
Thanks!
I'm really happy I've started doing poems. I never new I could be so good at them.
Exactly! Keep trying new things .. keep experimenting... You never know what all you have unless you try it.
That is true!
WOW! Amazing!!! You should add this poem in your novel. I absolutely loved it! The lines were brilliant.
I could visualize the scene. Vivid imagination. The picture you've added above says it all. The words have beautifully portrayed the scenes involving action. It needs a knack to write one. Amazing work! Keep up the writing.
Looking forward for more of your amazing works!
Thanks Sree! There is going to be fighting seen like this poem in my book. That is were i got the idea from. I can't way to post that chapter!
You're welcome!
Can't wait to read it!! Best wishes! ^^
Thanks!
You're welcome!