Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),
And Chapter 12 begins.
First Impression: Well that was a bit of an unexpected time jump there without much warning. That tension built up from Patrick setting out on that hard walk to try to save them. The possible consequences of Patrick not having gone to the bathroom is all just flushed down the toilet here. So that feels like a waste of good tension.
Anyway let's get to it,
The animals of Tayburn zoo were all crowded round the wooden tables in the lounge's left side. All those who could fit, that was. Patrick had offered to let the bigger animals try to Skype in, but they had declined. He would talk to them later. Those who had made it to the lounge were pressing as tightly they could onto the wooden charity-shop chairs. Birds were perched on the curved bars on the chair backs, frogs sat on the shoulders of monkeys.
And now I'm imagining an elephant trying to look at a tiny computer screen with those eyes of its.
"I just want you to know that I love you all, and we are going to figure this out," he said. His voice came out quieter than he'd realised it would, but soft was probably the way to go anyway. "Neuromax can't get rid of me. I'm the one that's done all the media interviews about you guys and your ‘amazing tricks’, so the public would ask questions. But of course, they also know I won't talk, because I don't want my part in what happened to all of you revealed."
So they can't arrange an....accident...
Patrick took a deep breath. He glanced at a group of three young monkeys, all of whom were holding back tears. Tears sprang to his eyes at the thought of what it must have been like for them to lose Chip. Then his gaze drifted towards Rita, the crocodile who until that morning had barely spent a moment apart from her best friend Dexi. He thought of the other two, Gerry the toucan and Lisa the young frog, whom he knew less well. It didn't matter how well he knew them; these were tight-knit communities.
And Aurora. Of course, Aurora. She had nobody to miss her, not properly yet. But Patrick felt her absence like a gaping wound in his heart.
Well it seemed like the animals were getting pretty chummy with her.
Treego sprang up from the nearest table and clung to Patrick's wrist. He scuttled up, then settled on his head. Patrick glared up in his direction, forcing back a giggle, but the smiles from the rest of the assembled animals suddenly felt like a very good idea, and he let himself give in to the laugh.
Laughing is definitely the way to go in a situation like this.
"Alright, listen up!" Treego called, pacing back and forth on Patrick's head. "We have exactly one way of communicating with our friends, and that is through Neuromax rep Tracy MacLean. Patrick is understandably nervous about this, given the mixup, but all of you heard the way Crothers and his boss spoke about her, and you know that she is definitely not on their side."
Yaay!! I was right the whole time. *does victory dance*
Patrick grumbled, wishing he'd witnessed this in person. Apparently she’d been referred to as traitor, softie and several other more explicit terms as she’d been ordered around the cages, taking the five animals away to Neuromax. He trusted the remaining animals, but that didn't mean he could quite bring himself to trust MacLean.
On second thought I'll refrain from possible premature celebration.
"This seems thin," Patrick said.
I think that should be a that.
Treego cleared his throat. "Right, yes, of course. Once they have these cameras, they are going to film what Neuromax does to them. At the end of each day that will sync with a computer here - we thought about livestream but worried about a signal being detected if the connection was constantly active. They are going to pretend to desperately miss Patrick - sorry, not pretend, emphasise."
Okay that's actually pretty smart to have thought of that.
"Okay, good," Treego said, "Patrick, to the lab!"
Yes. Time for science!!
And that's it.
Overall: Okay the plan is good on paper but let's see how well the execution goes. (Warning I will be sciencing this to death) And nice touch there in Treego's speech at the end. Looks like the plot at the moment is to save them so let's go with that and see if that is in fact the main arc of the story.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
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