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To answer your question, fishr, the fact about the gods you are talking about is being left open to give my readers something to think about. You have to remember, I wrote this Legacy as a legend written by the theories of man. Man in this story believes that the gods were created by Krazatan during the Big Bang. No solid proof of this is presented though. I'm giving my readers a chance to read "between the lines," so that their thoughts may contribute to what will happen later on in the story.

Before anyone else asks me any questions about my story, take a chance to think about what I wrote. Try to understand why I wrote it and how it may link up with my story later on. But, that's totally up to you. I'm just happy that you all show such interest in my work.

I thought the Big Bang was meant when the dinosaurs were wiped out. That was my first thought.

I do have one question; what are these Gods? Who are they before the Chaos Dragon? And what was their role?

Other than that, this is a cool story, I think. I like dragons so this got my interest right away. I didn't catch any grammar errors, so kudos to you on that.

I can tell you put a lot of time and effort into this story; it does show. I'll try and check back and read the next installment.

Just to let you all know, if you get a chance to read more of my story you'll find out that the dragons aren't actually evil. But, rather they are evil in the eyes of man. Man fear what they do not understand, and that is why the Dragon Knight Legacy was writen in the views of man.

And by the way, JiqSaw, the Big Bang that was mentioned in the prologue, it wrote it as being created by the Chaos Dragon. "The power of 100 billion supernovas split apart the dragon into five seporate spirits." And the story is not taking place in another world, its taking place on Earth. The story itself is being told on a continent that gets destroyed due to an epic battle in the end of my seiries. (destryoed as in what happined to Atlantis) If you read more closely you would have noticed that bit about Earth. About the part of chaos being divine, that will be left for later in my story. And its "divine power," it doesn't mean that the creature itself is divine, only that its powers were so great that they seemed divine. When it says, "more powerful than all the gods combine." Remember, this is in the views of man. At their time they believed that gods did exist and some even believed that Krazatan created them all in the explosion, although it wasn't relivent enough to mention in the prologue. The dragon was originally created before the universe. Most of the legacy is based on theory, no one knows where the dragon came from. I don't mean to be harsh with my replies.

And by the way, you all can be as harsh as you want to me with your critisism. Its goood for me, it gives me a perspective of how everyone, not just me, thinks of what I write. I will not be angry, nor will I be hurt with any future critisism.

(P.S. Thankyou, JiqSaw, for your insightful critisism.)

Okay, you want critique, then prepare yourself.

Billions of years ago before the "Big Bang" there was a being of divine power believed to be more powerful than all the Gods combined, Krazatan, The Chaos Dragon.

The plot was good , so was the plot but you should have put more discription . i would expect much less from a 16 year old (you,meaning that your writing is very advanced ). keep on writing

Great start, it sounds one of those movies were you see some old wise man reading a prophsey out of a old, large book. I didn't really like the fact that dragons are evil in your story, but I'll deal with it. Anyways, so far this is really good and I hope you continue, I'd love to read more.

When I get the good copy of my story finished, I plan to get it published just like Christopher Paolini and "Eragon."

Thanks for replying to my post. It means a lot to me that people would take the time to read my stuff. It took me about a year and a half just to finish the whole rough draft of my story. I put a lot of heart into the things I write. When I get the good copy of my story finished, I plan to get it published just like Christopher Paolini and "Eragon."






By the way, I don't want this to be moved to Fantasy Fiction. This is just the prologue of my story, explaining where I'm coming from with my ideas. The actual story itself consists of the main character traveling around an ancient continent called Horagothien hunting down the dragon that ruined his life.


(The quote below is the philosophy I live by)

Would you like this to be moved to Fantasy Fiction?

now that is a sweet story, sounds a little like the matrix, the one frees the people, dies, new one to save the people again, it is a really good start to a hopefully equally good story, keep it up, and keep posting, i will be hear to read it all.

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Sorry, at the top of my first messaage where it says, "do hesitate to let me know." I meant to say, "do 'not' hesitate to let me know." Didn't mean to overlook that.

Sorry, at the top of my first messaage where it says, "do hesitate to let me know." I meant to say, "do 'not' hesitate to let me know." Didn't mean to overlook that.