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for those of you who read this part of my story before I could finish it. My dad kicked me off his computer last night so he could do his work, so I had to finish it this morning. Sorry to keep you waiting.
I'm breaking up this chapter into two parts so people wouldn't get so discuraged because of the length of the chapter.
Yes, I agree 100%. This one was very well written. A lot of action and suspense. Go, go Inu Yasha! Er... I mean Kai.
Hehe... 
It appears Kai isn't aware of his claws, nor has absolute control over his anger. This should be interesting, hehe.
Ahh, and unfinished ending! Where's the rest of the last sentence?
At first, I thought this was going to be a Harvest Moon fanfic (are you familiar with it?), seeing as the names of the main characters are the name of a couple in the game. Though I don't usually read these types of stories, I kept reading because this was very well written. It really was. One thing I would suggest is more dialogue to break up the lengthy discriptions--or just more breaking up of paragraphs as is. I have a hard time reading things in a block. -Scratches head-
Anyway, nice work. : )