So this is where I say enough
This is where I pluck up the courage
This is the time when I become tough
Or at least I appear to be so to my entourage
I’m tired of all this pain
Tired of all this stress
Tired of all this strain
Tired of this persecution so immense
I’m now willing to reach the sky
I’m willing to become stone cold
Really I would wanna try
Yeah ‘cause somehow I’ve gotten bold
Don’t ask me how or why
It’s just like that so deal with it
I wanna now fly
Towards the sky here I just don’t fit
I’m tired of having noone care
Lemme say goodbye
‘Cause this frustration I no more wanna bear
Tired of all this yah, tired of all the lies
Why say you love me
If you really don’t care
If you really do why can’t you set me free?
Let me live my life like I dare
I think that if I go
My memory you’d scorn
‘Cause what I do know
Is that I really curse the day I was born
This is my last word
I don’t think I’ll change my mind
I’m tired of all your honey words
Which once upon a time made me blind
I’m back to reality dad and mum
Friends and foes
I’ve finally landed on my bum
‘Cause I hit reality so hard cause that’s what you all chose
I don’t think I regret
This is my destiny
On it you can bet
I no more care ‘cause I’m leavin…finally
You all don’t cry for me
Don’t any of you lament
Yeah right like if my absence you’d even see
Bye bye now before I say I can’t
And remember
I’m smiling as I end this show
‘Cause I’m free now of playin the misunderstood player
It’s time I end this show..time I say “no”
So once again goodbye
I know you all don’t care
Though maybe you did try
But my pain you couldn’t share
Well I’m going now
No worries you all
I’m taking my last bow
I’m steppin’ of the stage so fanatical… !
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I agree with RobsterJames, this would make a great song! Some people think there isn't a difference between lyrics and poetry, but there is. In order to be great (instead of just 'good'), poetry has to have a consistant beat and (if you choose to rhyme) understandable rhymes that don't sound forced. With lyrics, you are much more free with beat and rhyming, as you can change the song and delivery to make things fit together better.
So, if you like this as lyrics, it great! But if you want to leave this as a poem, there is a bit of work to do.
Let me know, and I'll help out more if I can!
Sage
This sounds like it would make a great song, I liked it, alot. It's kind of like a goodbye to everyone forever. I'm not sure what you mean by:
It sounds like sucicide, or to quit trying to be noticed, quite hard to tell. If you had a definate idea then you could make it clearer, but the poem is fantastic