I Thought I Could Trust You

Alright, here we go.
red = fixes in your text
blue = comments on what I suggested
orange = side notes

Doxie00 wrote:I thought I could trust you, --> comma
And went ahead and told you. --> period

Some things you shouldn't have known, I guess. -->period
But how could I have know that you'd force me into this mess?

I really trusted you, you know. --> period
You were the first guy to who I was really able to show. --> period

Real, pure, friendly affection, --> comma
And now here I am regretting...cause our friendship was a fiction. --> period and maybe get rid of the word here

"If only I had known"...always the same phrase.
It has become a refrain in my life, always always -->this maybe needs to be stated in a different way

What do I do now?
Watch you have your fun any how?
good, I liked these questions

Man was I a fool, --> comma
A total ridicule. --> period

To believe our friendship could be real, --> comma
is to believe in the way you made me feel. --> period

Now I know the truth,
You never really cared did you?
I like this stanza, but you start out by saying "Now I know the truth," and then you ask a question. Maybe the second line should say "You never really cared." ...just a thought.

You told me all these sweet things. --> period
And, when the warning bells started to ring, --> change 'but' to 'and' - two commas
I just ignored them; yeah cause I thought you were different. --> period and get rid of the 'yeah'
But now I see the real you; that you keeps showing itselfwithout relent. --> period and the second part of this was a little confusing.
also, I thought you should combine these two stanzas. It flowed better in my opinion

Damn was I blind, --> comma
To believe you could be my 'friend'. --> period
I was never really on your mind, --> comma
I bet inside I was your fiend.

"I thought I could thrust you"
When I read that I thought it was funny because it sounds sexual...I know you meant to say "I thought I could trust you".
You also spelled "and" wrong after you said "I thought I could trust you"
There were some other problems as well...the overall poem is very good, it's just that you really need to double check your work before you submit it. Some people can be really mean about puncuation not being correct and all. I personally don't care if I know exactly what the writer is talking about.

You did a very nice job.

I love, love, love it... although, I really don't know how you can feel this way... *ahem*
Anyway, I like it a lot because it is very meaningful and there are so many things that one can see from your words although it's a poem about only one things.
Keep writing!

I liked this. Good meaning, it's real.
I'd suggest punctuation. Everybody loves grammatically correct poems, right?
To start, there was one mis-spelling I caught, a couple M.I.A. commas, and some run-ons. Of course, this is poetry, so if the run-ons are intentional, let them be.
I love the first four lines.
Keep writing your heart out, muchacho.
It's pretty hard not to.
Thanks for the read.