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Hellooo Devan! *huggles*
I'm reviewing for christmas this august and I was wandering through the forums when I found your poem. I want to start off with saying that I really like this write! There's a great rhyme in this and the poem is deep! XD The grammar is excellent so congratulations on that. I do suggest you leave less space between the lines, because this way it will be easier to read. But maybe that's just me XD
I think it would look better like this:
But other than that this is a really great write! I hope this helped a little and I enjoyed reading and reviewing this.
Keep up the great work!
-qaralynn-
Holy damn I love your poetry. I swear, you're only 16 and write stuff like this? Incredible.'I wish I had the skills you have.
Keep on writing, I'll be reading for sure.
About this poem, it's easy to read, although you could expand on it.
Keep on writing!!!
Something new is about to begin
While all that you know will come to an end
Wind is rushing through the trees
Bringing the scent of old memories
Then the rain comes pouring down
The droplets crashing to the ground
Rivers flood with water drops
The whole world waits for the pain to stop
Finally the assault abates
Clouds are left in terror's wake
Everything is washed away
Nothing familiar can be found or saved
Your entire being fills with dread
As you realize that the past is dead
What once was, will never be again...
And you must start anew, my friend.
Instead of all the spaces I think You should only out one and I have to agree with 567ajt its good and you should expand it
Aww this is really nice. Exuse the 'Aww', I'm a guy with feelings
Great poem. I would suggest you expand it, it has great potential to be an extended piece. You rock! Keep it up.