Hey! So I noticed only one mistake! It was where it says Before overthinking left me panicing. Panicing is spelled wrong, it's supposed to be panicking. Anyway... So this poem had a deep meaning that I really liked. It showed a person's struggle with themselves and how they got better each year. It really brings light to humanity to know that somebody is out there and they are healing with each passing day. I liked the bold vs no bold, and it was a great effect that made the none bold stick out. I feel like everybody in some variety can relate to this. Whether you self harmed or not, if you had suicidal thoughts or not, everybody feels worthless to some degree and just because somebody doesn't have as severe thoughts it doesn't mean that they aren't going through pain and suffering. Just because somebody didn't self harm doesn't mean that they are not going through a lot. I think this just goes to show that people are what they seem on the inside. A lot of people have to fake a smile just to get through the day and that isn't right...... it makes me upset and distraught, and going through it myself I have more compassion and I feel their pain and I want to take it away. Anyway sorry I rambled a little bit. This is more or less a sensitive topic and I'd have to say you tackled it pretty well. It showed real emotion and sometimes I don't see that from poetry. There was only one mistake so good job. I love this poem and good luck at your contest. Keep writing <3
Sarah24
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