Cassie here!
I would like to start of by talking about this poem.You are right about this, writing does let us escape from our thoughts and from the world around us. (I'm guessing this is the meaning you were trying to portray. I am not going to lie at firs t I was confused. I felt like it did not flow , but when I saw the ending I thought the end was an amazing conclusion to this piece.
Some things I thought you could improve on. In the beginning try to portray more of what you want the readers to know. I felt like you were talking about multiple things, and that tends to confuse the readers. You have to stick to one subject. I understand if you are trying to talk about different things within the topics.
Overall this was an amazing poem! It was so well written I loved it a lot. Sorry if the nitpicks were too harsh , but I'm not very good at grammer so I thought I could help you in a different way. Overall this was a fantastic poem and I hope to hear more from you soon.
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