Young Writers Society

Hi there.

I just wanted to leave a quick review. First off, I really enjoyed your poem; it was emotionally wrenching and profound. I really like the way you portrayed the narrator's darkest thoughts as shattered reflections and the fact that the narrator could not recognize them at first shows how detached he/she became from him/herself.

The flow was really good too, great use of shortened verses and repetition that really drew me in
"My darkest secrets,
My quiet screams,
My trapped nature"

I did want to point out a few things I noticed that could make your poem even stronger:

"Even I, can't recognize who I am
Even I can't recognize what I've become"
(I would recommend adding a comma after the second "even I" so your verses are consistent and adds a dramatic pause to compliment the first).

"Am I just a reflection of bad?"
(Just my opinion, but I would recommend replacing "bad" with a stronger, more pointed adjective).

"The images gave me an answer which is
'I wasn't living life'"
(I would recommend removing "which is" and maybe putting a colon after "answer" or not. It would make the last verse much more concise and dramatic, especially since it's the last verse of the poem).

I really, really liked your poem and I hope you keep writing!

- Poetry Misfit

I loved reading this story! It really makes you think about who you are to your core.It makes you wonder about your true intentions and your darkest secrets.The mirrors could all be a representation of the narrator-or not.That’s the beauty of this story,the uncertainty and suspense.Overall,I enjoyed it.I hope you have a lovely day/night.