Young Writers Society

Hello there!
This has been a very interesting and a poem full of insights. A poem which is filled with many questions and has been able to intrigue my interest and is similar to questions I come across.
The poem, the simple yet deep questions you ask at every step give readers a space to think and analyze and not only this they are truly a highlight of this literary piece.
I loved how you expressed yourself and even gave your own idea and conclusion. I believe Its a contentment which can be achieved for short periods and happiness leads the way. This has been a very interesting subject.
You have done a good job. Keep Writing! Best wishes

That’s a different view on what happiness is.Are you saying there is no joy in life and we’re all actually sad? Or are you saying that the light and green emotions we feel isn’t happiness,but something else? Something we can’t define? Or is it something different? What feelings do we really have? What are we really feeling? I hope you have a blessed and amazing day and night.

I like this poetry-- it sounds like something said in slam poetry! I can agree that I could see the clear topic/subject of "happiness" throughout your poetry, and I like it. Although if I had a critique, I think the second line of "Is it an emotion of being happy?" may contradict the entire purpose of the poem, and some of the long lines that made it chunky, otherwise it's good!
Overlooking, I liked the repeated/similar phrases of lines, which isn't an easy technique (which I still struggle with lol, and I think I liked it) executed well by several writers, but matched with the purpose and the subject/topic of your poetry too!

Generally, I enjoyed reading your poem about happiness! The idea of using this rhetorical question in poetry was executed quite well for me!

You have a very queer view of happiness and I am very intrigued by it. If we cannot identify something, is it real? Sure, some things can make us happy like candy, family, friends, or jewelry. But happiness does not stay. Eventually, we all find something to be upset about. We seem to hold onto anger, sadness, despair, and disappointment but happiness always seems to go. Happiness always seems short-lived. How do we hold onto happiness? We cannot. We cannot hold onto happiness because it takes a lot to make us happy. Everything has to go our way for us to be happy. But perhaps, if we just took a minute to breathe, we could look at things from a different angle. When things go exactly our way it means that things are not going someone else's way. Since we are all different, everyone has a different way of how things should go. Sometimes we have to do things a different way at the expense of our happiness to make other people happy instead of the other way around. And maybe, just maybe, the end result will make you happier than you would have been if things had gone exactly your way. And then, maybe we will be a little closer to holding onto happiness for a little longer.