Young Writers Society

author13 wrote:Well thanks to magicman I now have a place for my proses. So heres the first offical prose! Its kinda random though

If I could turn back time,
you bet your butt I would, [I would suggest a period here as opposed to a comma]
I'd go back to whenever,
I'd see what turns my life would make,
If I'd done just one thing different.
But most of all I think I'd go
backwards to re-do it.

Nice. I think it belongs here in Other Fiction; I once wrote (a very bad) something like this, and it would have been better off (not written) put in this section.

Yes, the subject has been done before, but it was still good. Still something that made me read it.

Hmm yeah maybe should be in poetry but I'm not sure really :S

I'm not really sure about this piece it's a bit bland, and very cliche... well I have seen lot's of prose and poetry on the subject. But I think that you could maybe turn it around and make it a little more unique? Or maybe I'm just not getting it atall...probably the case...

Sorry that was really useless what I wrote there! :p

Meevs
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Don't you think that would be better off in the poetry section? Otherwise it was good. Thoughtful and sweet. I'm sure a lot of people would like to do that too, I know I would.