Bury me with a sweet cats kiss and a cup of Boston Tea
Cause everything I did was for her, not me
~
The sun rises without a blossom there
The birds call out like anyone would care
A sweet reminder of the memories buried down
A Circus Grave is fitting in this ghost town
Purple flowers frayed with blue
When I think of it, I know nothin' bout you
Boston Tea Party for a birthday date
You were never mine no need for the hate
~
Bury me with another flower, add it to the list
No need to remind me what I missed
Lay me in a Circus Grave; nail my casket
Couldn't even save her, don't have to ask it
Bury me with a sweet cats kiss and a cup of Boston Tea
Cause everything I did was for her, not me.
Bury me with Boston tea
~
A sweet, deep voice whispers in my ear
As if I'd let go of someone so dear
let that voice sing all damn day long
I know that it ain't where I belong
Stomach clenched, flowers in my hand
The memories, they always pile like sand
Whatever you do, don't drown my rose
Save her from the imprint, and let me drown alone
~
Bury me with another flower, add it to the list
No need to remind me what I missed
Lay me in a Circus Grave; nail my casket
Couldn't even save her, don't have to ask it
Bury me with a sweet cats kiss and a cup of Boston Tea
Cause everything I did was for her, not me.
Bury me with Boston tea
~
Eyes wide open, can't sleep at all
I only heard the crash and never saw the fall
Don't matter what I did, you were never mine
You act like you love me but you don't, so fine
I know you think of me when your head hits the bed
And that is why my stomach has stopped filling with dread
So just bury me in my Circus Grave with a cup of Boston tea
~
Bury me with another flower, add it to the list
No need to remind me what I missed
Lay me in a Circus Grave; nail my casket
Couldn't even save her, don't have to ask it
Bury me with a sweet cats kiss and a cup of Boston Tea
Cause everything I did was for her, not me.
Bury me with Boston tea
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Hello there, Akira! I'm reviewing using the YWS S'more Method today!
Shalt we commence with the possessed S’more?
Top Graham Cracker - The protagonist is laid down to sleep, with flowers and Boston tea, memories of the show flooding through, a life of glamour coming to a close.
Slightly Burnt Marshmallow - I think that you meant to say “cat’s” at one part, but that’s just one little thing.
Chocolate Bar - So, this is the end of part one of the “Showtime” series. If there is a part two, I will be sure to check it out. But I like this song all the same, my favorite lyric being “Cause everything I did was for her, not me”. It gives off a feeling that the protagonist might have been disconnected from who they were all along.
Closing Graham Cracker - A somber, yet beautiful ending to the Showtime series. I’ll keep an eye out for part two, but if that doesn’t happen, I want you to know that I really enjoyed this series and I hope that you continue writing. ^v^
I wish you a fabulous day/night! :>
Your poem is deeply moving and filled with heartfelt emotions. The imagery you use, like the sweet cats kiss and the cup of Boston Tea, adds a touch of sweetness and nostalgia to the piece. It's clear that you poured your heart into these words, expressing the pain of unrequited love and the longing for someone who was never truly yours. The repetition of certain lines creates a sense of rhythm and emphasizes the emotions conveyed. Your poem captures the bittersweet essence of love and loss. Keep writing and expressing yourself through your beautiful words!