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Circus Freak

by AkiraEliza


Welcome to the circus, welcome to the show

Where being normal's boring, and insane is practical

Bein' ordinary will isolate, just so you know

It's too bad, so bad, you'll always be alone

You won't touch a needle, yet you reap what you sow

~

"You know that there's no one like me"

That's the point, you were my dream

You always abused me so beautifully

You cut me off, and stole my sanity

I wished, for so long, it was meant to be

and now I'm a Circus Freak

~

We could have had it all, but the scars on my face

They refuse to heal, and they'll always leave a trace

Of what you did from me, what you stole from my embrace

Here's a ticket, you'll need it, so you can see what I made-

YOU made me a Circus Freak

Welcome to the circus, welcome to the show

Where being normal's borning, and insane is practical

Bein' ordinary will isolate, just so you know

It's too bad, so bad, you'll always be alone

You wont touch a needle, yet you reap what you sow

~

"You insane, obsessive bastard, go and die"

If I said I didn't miss you, that would be a lie

But the only ones here were you and I!

Some how, it feels so good to cry

If it makes you happy, there's good in goodbye!

And now I'm a Circus Freak

~

We could have had it all, but the scars on my face

They refuse to heal, and they'll always leave a trace

Of what you did from me, what you stole from my embrace

Here's a ticket, you'll need it, so you can see what I made-

YOU made me a Circus Freak

Welcome to the circus, welcome to the show

Where being normal's boring, and insane is practical

Bein' ordinary will isolate, just so you know

It's too bad, so bad, you'll always be alone

You wont touch a needle, yet you reap what you sow

~

~

~

You made the tools, you made the payment fee

You pieced together a monster made of memories

"Don't come back here" yet you crawl right back

"Don't come back here" I thought we left it at that

you left me so fragile 

you left me so  weak,

now I'm nothing left but a Circus Freak

How does it feel, knowin' you cant let go?

I've finally gotten over you, finally, you can know

here's a ticket, you'll need it, so you can see what I made-

YOU made me nothing but a Circus Freak

~

We could have had it all, but the scars on my face

They refuse to heal, and they'll always leave a trace

Of what you did from me, what you stole from my embrace

Here's a ticket, you'll need it, so you can see what I made-

YOU made me a Circus Freak

Welcome to the circus, welcome to the show

Where being normal's boring, and insane is practical

Bein' ordinary will isolate, just so you know

It's too bad, so bad, you'll always be alone

You wont touch a needle, yet you reap what you sow

And I'm now the star of my show (not you)

Circus Freak


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vampricone6783 says...



Another cultured circus lover. I enjoyed reading this song, and I appreciate the dark circus vibes. I’ll be sure to check out your other songs! ^v^




AkiraEliza says...


thanks!



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KaavyaK wrote a review...



This is an amazing poem.

I had a really bad day today because of someone and this poem is quite suitable for the situation.

"We could have had it all, but the scars on my face
They refuse to heal, and they'll always leave a trace
Of what you did from me, what you stole from my embrace
Here's a ticket, you'll need it, so you can see what I made-
YOU made me a Circus Freak
Welcome to the circus, welcome to the show
Where being normal's boring, and insane is practical
Bein' ordinary will isolate, just so you know
It's too bad, so bad, you'll always be alone
You wont touch a needle, yet you reap what you sow"
This poem is great but particularly this paragraph is marvelous.
I loved this paragraph, the author rocked, and the readers are shocked.

Awesome.
Keep it up.
Waiting for more.
Thank you.




AkiraEliza says...


thanks. its sad to say that the worst part is is that I'd let her join my circus any time. I'll probably make a sequel to this :)



KaavyaK says...


Waiting for the next part...



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RavenAkuma wrote a review...



Hello, My Friend!

I am Raven, and upon stumbling across this piece in the Green Room, I thought I'd leave a review.

Oh my gosh, I loved this! The theme is so cool; it feels like there's a lot of great, rich meaning that was woven into this piece, made easy to understand by the vibrant -yet quite eerie- circus theme. It acts as a very good analogy for this short story of troubled romance.

As for a more technical review, I have nothing much to say. I didn't spy any errors or the like, the subtle rhyme scheme worked great, and I very much enjoyed the formatting. The whole thing reads very smoothly, as the lyrics should. I could absolutely imagine a tune behind this. Great writing job ~

Picking a favorite line in this would be super hard. One thing I enjoyed a lot was the chorus you had going:

Welcome to the circus, welcome to the show

Where normal is boring, and insane is practical

Bein' ordinary will isolate, just so you know

It's too bad, so bad, you'll always be alone

You won't touch a needle, yet you reap what you sow


The idea that at this circus, "being ordinary" will result in you becoming the unordinary one is a very telling thing. The circus sounds like a place for the rejected and pariahs, with the singer/narrator holding the power and telling their story. And that final line really makes you think about the meaning, which I enjoyed.

Then, when repeating this chorus at the end, the change in ending...

And I'm now the star of my show (not you)

Circus Freak


Love that! So bold, so confident, and I imagine that last "Circus Freak" in a song would just be one of those things that can give you goosebumps. Very cool ~

Overall, I enjoyed this so much! You really showed a talent for writing lyrics, and I like your style a lot (I feel like we would get along well so I gave you a follow). Again, great writing job, thanks for sharing this piece with us! :D

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AraWolf wrote a review...



Hi!
First of all, I would like to share that the song/poem/thingy-mijingy is quite good! I love the rhythm and way that it moves.
Now for the review. I think that to keep the rhythm that you have going on, you need to read it out loud to yourself. One of the things that I noticed is that when you say this:

Where normal is boring, and insane is practical

It sounds a bit choppy. The part that sounds choppy, (at least to me) is the part where you say insane is practical. If you change the word practical to a two syllable word such as useful, you might find that it creates a better sense of beat and rhythm. The part where you say this:
You make me so fragile and weak

Might make a little more sense and have a little more rhythm if you say

you make me so fragile
you make me so weak

Instead.
Here are some final thoughts:
1. Rhythm is hard to master, so don’t despair, I feel your magic in the air. ;)
2. Beat is simple, just fire the pistol off on your targets “one two three four”! ;)
3. Continue your work for fame for you lurks in the corners of you and your mind. ;)

Thank you for reading my review, and if you would like, please check out my piece “Burgundy Sight” (note that it is a murder mystery and starts with a prologue!)
Thank you again,
—AraWolf





Monster is a relative term. To a canary, a cat is a monster. We're just used to being the cat.
— Henry Wu, "Jurassic World"