Singing about flowers all the time
Up till now it’s been the same old rhyme
People will grow tired of a repeating act
So let’s add a new getup while staying intact
Circus memories dancing in a row
No one else is interested in what else I have tow
Gotta keep track what people want to stay in beat
While knowing what to stop going on repeat
~
Let’s be a Circus Animal!
Let’s grow insane, grown insane, won’t be defined
Let’s be a Circus Animal (you left me all alone and I'M NOT FINE)
I knew I had to add the tiger act sometime
Just know that this freakshow has always been mine!
Let us be, let us be, a Circus Animal
We grow insane, grow insane, won’t be defined
~
My business is thriving while yours is falling down low
The world will know my name not yours, I hope you know
The audience will always continue to grow
I’ve been through hell and back and I’ve pushed through fire and snow!
Listen honey, you have your friends and I have mine
But you’re the one who left the show, so it’s fine
Look at you, look at me, I ain’t depressed no more
I forgot you and I’m so much better than before!
~
Let’s be a Circus Animal!
Let’s grow insane, grown insane, won’t be defined
Let’s be a Circus Animal (you don't want me, that's fine)
I knew I had to add the tiger act sometime
Just know that this freakshow has always been mine!
Let us be, let us be, a Circus Animal
We grow insane, grow insane, wont be defined
~
Don’t get me wrong, you’re engraved in my memory
But it’s time to nail your casket and ditch you in the cemetary
Nailed with flowers, don’t worry you are safe
When it comes to your heart I’ve finally stopped given chase
Go and live your life, but you’ll end up living it alone
And I know you miss me, so I’ll leave it set and done
Cause in my new act I’m the tiger, you’re the sheep
And when I hunt you down for good
The act is done and you need to leave
~
Let’s be a Circus Animal!
Let’s grow insane, grown insane, won’t be defined
Let’s be a Circus Animal (until the end of time)
I knew I had to add the tiger act sometime
Just know that this freakshow has always been mine!
Let us be, let us be, a Circus Animal
We grow insane, grow insane, wont be defined
Let us be, let us be a Circus Animal
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Hello fellow writer! Ley here to write a short tortoise-y review on this amazing work you've published! This is a new review style that I'm using only for the month of June, in spirit of the Great Tortoise Race! Let's get started, 'shell' we? xD
Shell Start: This is a lovely poem! It reflects themes of self-reflection and self-expression, as well as moving on from past trauma and relationships. I love Circus-themed things, so when I saw the name of this poem I just had to click on it-- and you didn't disappoint at all! I was captivated from the start of the poem, all the way until the end. It really is a great poem-- and I'll go through some of the literary devices that intrigued me down below! <3
Favorite Leaf:
I have many favorite things I could say about this poem, but I'll just name a couple and elaborate on them: Let's talk about the actual theme and literary device provided the most times in this poem: the Circus Animal metaphor. To me, this metaphor represents the narrator being a carefree individual, much like a circus, who doesn't abide by normal rules or regulations. As you said in the poem:
Lovely way to embrace that theme even more!
Independence is another major theme presented multiple times in your poem. I love reading poems about independence, mostly because I'm a feminist, but I also think it fits right in with the rest of the lines you provided for us. Amazing job!
Shell Fractures:
I honestly couldn't find anything wrong with this work, and since it's poetry, I don't really feel comfortable pointing anything out either way. I really enjoyed this in it's entirety, and think it's great just the way it is!
Overall: This was amazing! You really hit every mark-- ranging from themes of independence, retaliation, and empowerment. Great job!
Thank you for taking the time to read this review! I hope to see you join the race, and keep being awesome! Happy Writing~
Hello there, human! I'm reviewing using the YWS S'more Method today!
Shalt we commence with the mutated S’more?
Top Graham Cracker - The protagonist is done with the Jester. He’s ruined her enough, and it is time that she become a Circus Animal, and ruin him instead.
Slightly Burnt Marshmallow - There’s one part where you said “grown” but that’s just one little thing.
Chocolate Bar - A change of pace! No longer is the protagonist depressed, she’s insane. She doesn’t care anymore. I love how you portrayed her as a “Circus Animal” to show how feral she has become, and how what the Jester did could not be undone, ever.
Closing Graham Cracker - The protagonist has new fame, and her Jester is dead to her. She won’t care for him anymore, and instead live her life in the Circus, living to her own desires.
I wish you a lovely day/night! :>