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Ok, when I saw Avengers, I was like, yessss! Anyway, I like how you voiced the characters, you kept them actually in character, which not a lot of fanfics do. I think it flowed pretty well, and I didn’t find any grammar mistakes, so good job. I would like to see more Avengers scripts because I really like the way you write them. This was really good.
You have great skills. Keep up the good work
~AngelLily 😇

Ok, when I saw Avengers, I was like, yessss! Anyway, I like how you voiced the characters, you kept them actually in character, which not a lot of fanfics do. I think it flowed pretty well, and I didn’t find any grammar mistakes, so good job. I would like to see more Avengers scripts because I really like the way you write them. This was really good.
You have great skills. Keep up the good work
~AngelLily 😇

This is good maybe add some more context into the plot line. Like how did they survive? But Peter is Super cute and Loki is as hot as ever and strange is well... strange. I would recommend making a series baced on this story line! *koff koff* or a Loki book!:} But this is super good I love it a lot keep up the good work!

Hello there. I figured I'd give you a second review on this and boot it out of the Green Room.

Judging by a comment below, I understand this was meant to be less of a strict script and more like something for fun. Either way, I'd like to discuss what things you could do with this idea of yours, especially if you really wanted to make a more formative script, instead of mainly dialogue chunks from the four characters.

I do see that this is set in some time of the future, and coincides with the very popular fan theory that at least some of the characters previously thought of as dead, or at least, disappeared in the previous Avengers movie. I actually would have been really curious to see if you have any specific details on what you think will happen between now and whatever time period this takes place in. That tidbit of them supposedly still being dead to the public caught my eye, but since this is more of a light story, that wasn't addressed too much.

In terms of the characters themselves, I think they're portrayed decently - I'm curious as to how "close" they seem - that's why I wish there was more backstory (but I do understand having fun writing fanfiction!) so I could get to know this version of these three characters in particular. (You have good taste in favorite Avengers XD). What had been a little confusing was that Loki seemed to be appearing as Tony actually (that had thrown me off a bit) but overall, it wasn't too bad to differentiate between who's speaking.

I liked the jokes! I think this was fun to read, and I hope it was fun to write as well. Here's to a good Avengers ending for next movie c:

I saw Avengers in the title and freaked. No lie. Marvel is the best. So, naturally, I had to slide in for a review. ;p

First off, first off: Loki! <3
Who doesn't love that guy? I was thrilled to simply read about him and I thought you voiced him well. I truly can imagine him telling the good doctor that he couldn't pull off the classic Loki look - though I found the comparison to a hobbit strange since that sent my thoughts spiraling off in Lord of the Rings/The Hobbit direction, which doesn't even relate to the Avengers. (Do hobbits even exist in this Avengers-world?) Looking back at my main point, though, I thought you voiced all the characters well. Peter sounds like the exuberant teenager he is, and Dr. Strange is calm and composed as normal. I only thought he seemed a touch out of character when he questioned the cashier on flatirons. His language is usually more... formal? The questions just didn't sound like something the distinguished doctor would say.

While I enjoyed reading the dialogue, I was disappointed when it ended. There wasn't an arc to the story: no conflict or character development or anything. It could be considered a sketch, it's certainly short enough to be one, but I don't see the ending as a punchline. The comment concerning Plastic could be considered a funny little joke (and don't get me wrong, I did find it amusing) but it doesn't make a giant impact. I am keeping in mind that this is flash fiction, which can be tricky, staying in the word limit and such. But every story needs a well, story, and that seems to be missing here.

I was kind of expecting something crazy to happen: Thanos to suddenly appear or Loki to temporarily turn evil... Speaking of Thanos, though, I was a bit unnerved by how normal everything was. I hadn't expected the Avengers to be sitting around moping after Thanos showed up but I certainly didn't expect them to be grocery shopping. xD That fact amused me, as much of this dialogue did. It was an entertaining read for sure, but as I said earlier, I think there could be more of a story.

keep it up!
~rosette <3

This fills me with life thank you very much

Hello! First off, great job, second, I loved this. Third, this is honestly good enough to be turned into a play. If there were in spelling mistakes, I was laughing to hard to notice them. It was so, so, so, so, good. Keep writing, and I'll be happy!

Horisun OUT!